wish on me MAG

August 1, 2014
By Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski


i am alone
on an old, wooden dock
with ice-crystal
stars
below me
(twinkling in an abysmal sea)
i lie with my cheek pressed
to the very
edge,
arms folded pleasantly
(waiting)
and close my eyes,
but stay
facing whatever lies beyond
this fragile bed
(hoping)
to roll off and
fall
into a dream
where i’ll join my
sisters
(in their heavenly dance)
i am a solitary
beacon,
a glowing figure up here
among onyx
skies
(ripe and ready)
this white nightgown
makes my pale skin even more
ghostlike,
it’s as though
(i’m already one of them)
and the freckles
dusting my nose
betray the nebulas
writhing inside
me
(imploding)
so when these ancient
lullabies
finally call my name,
do not mourn
as i fall off
this dock
(a shooting star)
because i’ll be walking
amongst angels,
and like a prayer you may
wish on me
(and i will answer.)



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on Jun. 21 2015 at 12:43 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

No, thank you for reading! Wow, this makes me so happy :)

on Jun. 21 2015 at 12:42 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I feel so blessed that you would take the time to read my stuff. You're amazing. Thank YOU.

on Apr. 16 2015 at 11:47 pm
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)
"I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right." -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, "The Book Thief"

I was looking through the published poems this month, searching for something from you, and sure enough, I (re)found this. The imagery, and the ending, is extremely unique and beautiful, as is everything you write. Congratulations on getting published, Jade. I have yet to understand the meaning behind the parenthesis, but I hope I will in the many more times that I'm going to read this in the future. Thank you!

on Apr. 16 2015 at 6:32 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Congrats @Jade.I.Am on your writing being published on Teen Ink! You truly deserve it, and I'm happy for you. Thank you again for sharing this. :)

on Mar. 15 2015 at 1:29 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

You're too kind! Thank you.

Beila BRONZE said...
on Mar. 5 2015 at 12:14 am
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
3 articles 0 photos 519 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The coldest winter I ever spent was a summer in San Francisco." -Mark Twain

Breathtaking and heartstopping. Your words weave magic. Props on this masterful use of line breaks and parentheses. You kind of made me want to go outside, look up into the night, and find you, shining brilliance down on us in beams of hope.

on Aug. 8 2014 at 12:06 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

aw my heart got cut off. sad face

on Aug. 8 2014 at 12:05 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank youu!!!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 7 2014 at 5:43 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Exquisitely beautiful. It might be that I'm biased when it comes to stars and nebulas and all that jazz; but you know, I'm an admirer of the infinite celestial bodies. I adore the format in this poem (yes, I do notice format and structure ;P). And the emotion envelops the reader as does the imagery with its haunting void/spiritual feeling. One of my favorites by you, pimp. 5/5

on Aug. 6 2014 at 9:51 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

thanks for reading :)

on Aug. 6 2014 at 2:03 am
SpidersAcrossStars PLATINUM, Hayward, California
38 articles 0 photos 160 comments

Favorite Quote:
For you, a thousand times over.

all i can say is wow

on Aug. 3 2014 at 11:32 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thanks for reading :)

on Aug. 3 2014 at 11:28 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is amazingly written! Your poem is wonderful! It's so very descriptive and very powerful. Thank you for sharing this!

on Aug. 2 2014 at 11:45 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

thank you :)

on Aug. 2 2014 at 11:19 pm
Katie289 SILVER, Lexington, Massachusetts
5 articles 1 photo 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"If you're always trying to be normal you'll never know how amazing you can be," ~Maya Angelou

These words drew me into this world you've beautifully crafted, this is just amazing. 

on Aug. 2 2014 at 7:08 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

no, thank you. glad you liked it :)

on Aug. 2 2014 at 7:07 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

thank YOU for reading.

on Aug. 2 2014 at 4:27 pm
AprilNicoleJones BRONZE, New Castle, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I write only because
there is a voice within me
that will not be still."
~ SYLVIA PLATH

(MY FORMER ACCOUNTS: Icantwrite & Punk.Snowflake)
Published poems from my former accounts:
- FRAIL HOPE (Icantwrite)
- YOURSELF (Punk.Snowflake)

Dear, this is BEAUTIFUL. Thank you so much for brightening my day with your art. Please keep writing, gorgeous. ;)

on Aug. 2 2014 at 1:53 pm
ProphecyMist SILVER, Fort Collins, Colorado
8 articles 73 photos 4 comments
This is gorgeous. Thank you.


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