Solely Bits

July 1, 2014
By elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.


A bit of grey, a bit of black,
A bit of have, a bit of lack,
A bit of light, a bit of shade,
A bit visible, a bit fade.
Collecting bits of everything,
Collecting thing by thing,
A bit of this, a bit of that,
A bit of take, a bit of let,
A bit of narrow, a bit of path,
A bit of life, a bit of death.


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written : 20.3.2014.

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on Sep. 19 2014 at 1:12 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

Thank you for refering on this poem in particular, and thank you for the advixe! I am glad you liked it and gave it a thought. :)

Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 18 2014 at 5:57 pm
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
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Favorite Quote:
The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened.
- Thomas Jefferson

it has a good rhyming scheme but i feel like if you could the rest of the poem the same feel as the first two then if would be even more incredible! just becuase the first two are so amazing. i do like it tho.  

on Jul. 8 2014 at 4:13 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

Thank you :), i as i wrote it i focused on the construction 4 verses with bit, than 2 verses explaining and then again 4 verses with a bit, ending with death as it all does. I just can't come to conclusion what could I have added more, could you explain? You definitely made me think :D

on Jul. 8 2014 at 4:11 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

thank you, i like that you found something in it.

lydia.w GOLD said...
on Jul. 3 2014 at 11:18 am
lydia.w GOLD, Myerstown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I was always an unusual girl.
My mother told me I had a chameleon soul, no moral compass pointing due north, no fixed personality; just an inner indecisiveness that was as wide and as wavering as the ocean...
And if I said I didn't plan for it to turn out this way I'd be lying...
Because I was born to be the other woman.
Who belonged to no one, who belonged to everyone.
Who had nothing, who wanted everything, with a fire for every experience and an obsession for freedom that terrified me to the point that I couldn't even talk about it, and pushed me to a nomadic point of madness that both dazzled and dizzied me.

I love how you repeat "a bit" but I feel like this poem is really simple and you could've added some more. Other than that, your over all idea is great!

on Jul. 3 2014 at 10:02 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

I appreciate your opinion, Thank you! 

jolo said...
on Jul. 3 2014 at 8:56 am
i think it has all, i feel this song and feel the bits in me, the bits you lose after something bad and bits you look to find what you did lose

on Jul. 2 2014 at 4:54 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

This piece leaves me wanting something more. I get what you are trying to convey but I think you have the potential to do better


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