Writing Freeze MAG

December 6, 2008
By Dominique Bible BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
Dominique Bible BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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My once fluid imagination has
stopped. I’m frozen.
Stopped, and distracted,
I freeze.
The leaves have stopped mid-air.
On a slant and on a pause, the leaf cannot fall.
On a gray, about to be blue, Tuesday morning,
life should be ready to burst.
Juices of sunlight would pour from the parting clouds.
But, from my fingers, only empty air.
They’ve not yet fallen, those leaves from this morning.
When will they land?
The anticipation is a killer
The branches peer down.
Wonder why their leaves have stopped?
Creations of color, but when.
When? will these bites of yellow touch base with the earth?
Tell me.
I’m winter when it’s autumn,
I’m still when my duty is motion.
Frozen, when all I want is to pour.


The author's comments:
I was trying to write a piece on racism, but my fingers could barely function. My sentences were forced and they made no sense. Suddenly, I was writing to lament my lack of writing. Funny, huh? Oh, I hope the formatting came out okay. I used HTML. Thank you, and I hope you enjoyed it.

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dooblabox said...
on Aug. 14 2010 at 11:10 am

Practice, practice, practice. And read.

Best of Luck,

Dominique


on Aug. 13 2010 at 9:59 pm
LoverOfSong PLATINUM, New Lenox, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"When words fail, music speaks." Hans Christian Anderson

I completely understand what youmeannn!!! ur really goood!!! Wanna give me some advice on my writing? I'd be forever grateful!

on Mar. 26 2010 at 4:40 am
MourningStar BRONZE, Surabaya, Other
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I truly love this poem.

Your writing flows really well - but what really got to me was how you transitioned into writing racism, to something else. Well it kind of makes sense to me... especially how hard it is to write a poem on racism... and that's how you feel in your poem - frozen, when all you want to do is pour...

I think this poem is great. Keep writing.


on Nov. 6 2009 at 2:43 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-

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Jessah GOLD said...
on Aug. 20 2009 at 4:09 pm
Jessah GOLD, Westbrook, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
“Love hurts. There is nothing as painful as heartbreak. But in order to learn to love again you must learn to trust again.”

Nicholas Sparks

I really like this poem. Good Job. It came out fine.

on Aug. 15 2009 at 5:44 am
ayeBNFx3 SILVER, Bronx, New York
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NY^^! Very Good, hmmm.. these people neeed to commmentt -_-




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