Along the Way MAG

November 29, 2008
By Andrew Dobies GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
Andrew Dobies GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
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How many faces and birthdays will I come to remember
before my eyes shut for the last time
and I find myself in that closet I hid in that smelled of laundry softener
in the third grade because I didn’t belong in a girl’s house?
How many fingers and palms and fingernails
will I see amid how many trees, swinging green and happy branches in the spring
like the clasped hands of middle aged lovers who left the kids at home with a babysitter
so they could go for an afternoon walk?
I imagine there will be enough smiles and enough tears
that if I wanted to I could flood the city of New York
and swim through those blurred lights in the dead of an August night
and sing along with the crickets and the distorted sound of drowned car horns.
Hopefully I’ll have a bag of forehead wrinkles and boxes full of voices
from teachers and friends and train conductors
who say the most unimportant things like “May I see your ticket?”
Hopefully there will be shoes and coats from parties
and sloppy kisses on doorsteps in cold January nights
where my breath will be visible in the air and the ice near my feet
will sparkle and gleam in the periodic flicker of the dying bulb
in her porch light.
Even if things go wrong,
at least there will be the smell of honeysuckle and sweat
in my mother’s hair as she held me to her chest as I came fresh from the womb
and there will always be those fluorescent lights.



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on Nov. 1 2010 at 11:31 am
OneProzacADay PLATINUM, State College, Pennsylvania
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"You are the universe expressing itself as human for a little while." -Eckhart Tolle

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on Nov. 1 2010 at 7:47 am
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wow this poem is beautiful

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on Oct. 10 2010 at 1:54 pm
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You've gotta work like you don't need the money/love like you'll never be hurt/
Sing like no one is listening/ and live like it's heaven on Earth.-Anonymous

In a word? Beautiful. I loved tha analogies you created and the simple way of explaining what you wish to happen before you die. You took those pictures in your mind and translated them wonderfullly into words. Keep wriitng!

on Oct. 10 2010 at 12:57 am
Michelle24 GOLD, Riverwoods, Illinois
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"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."-Dr. Seuss

"Life is not measured by the breaths we take but by the moments that take our breath away."-Unknown

This was both touching and inspiring. Keep up the amazing work. I don't think I could ever be as amazing as you are! I love this one. Almost too much.

on Sep. 18 2010 at 3:21 pm
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
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"There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it." -Oscar Wilde

Beautifully written, love it!

on Aug. 27 2010 at 11:52 am
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
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"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
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 rellly nice. the ending is abrupt but it makes sense. gud job

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on Aug. 27 2010 at 5:12 am
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nice nd touching.......good job

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on Aug. 5 2010 at 10:29 pm
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on Aug. 5 2010 at 11:05 am
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

great emotion and it flowed very nicely. i love how simply you ended it, the ending made the piece that much better. great great work. keep writing, Mel :)

on Jul. 27 2010 at 9:05 am
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That was really great! Moving! TWO THUMBS WAY UP!

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on Jul. 14 2010 at 6:17 pm
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 This is really good, :)

on Jul. 14 2010 at 4:14 pm
bbygurl21 PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
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this poem touched me so deep good job

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on Jul. 14 2010 at 2:11 pm
i really liked the poem it was beautiful.

on Jul. 14 2010 at 12:59 pm
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In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.
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Because I could not stop for death, He kindly stopped for me; The carriage held but just ourselves and immortality.
Emily Dickinson

when writing poetry, it's putting your personal feelings into written words, and it isn't all that simple. when you get the meaning or the feeling, then the poet has done something right. i understand this poems meaning and think that it is well put into words

on Jul. 14 2010 at 1:03 am
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"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
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great job. i love the message you have portrayed. and your use of imagery is..amazing:) i recently joined the site and nearly none of my work has yet been accepted. but two of my pieces have, and id love if you viewed them and told me what you think. great job!!

on Jun. 22 2010 at 6:51 pm
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on Jun. 22 2010 at 2:33 pm
brysmarie12 PLATINUM, Neoga, Illinois
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I am the author of my own life... unfortunately I'm writing in pen and can't erase my mistakes.

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on Jun. 22 2010 at 8:33 am
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wow i wish i could write like you :) 


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