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Serenade the Empty Sound This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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A low buzz
the buildings at work
a soft beat
as the clock ticks away
I shouldn’t be here
yet I’m forced to stay
like cattle they herd us in
prisoners of few mistakes
we sit in silence
wait ’til day breaks
one gets caught
he disappears
with a lady in sharpened heels
people pass by
but we go unseen
hidden in shadows that mourn
but in this place
so toweringly large
their yells are like whispers
thrown empty to space
outside they’re dancing
outside they sing
they don’t hear the silence echo
and the emptiness ring
they begin to read
voices in unison
like a chant
turned evil by spell
magic is murder
and deceit is dear
maybe this will go over well
but if by chance I fade so far
nobody would know
there’d be no one to tell
let them know it’s Heaven I found
and refused my entry to Hell

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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mimirocks124 said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 3:25 pm:
i love how u rhymed only some lines. i don fully understand what your talking about, but i think it's good
 
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Soccer33 said...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 6:40 pm:

great job i loved the ryhme sceem.. i sort of wish i could write like that!!!

 

 
cupcake420 replied...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 8:35 pm :
i seconed that......
 
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Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 29, 2010 at 6:24 pm:
the rhyme scheme keeps the reader going... good job, read mine?
 
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zobo929 said...
Jul. 7, 2010 at 9:58 am:
this is really good and the thruth i can totally relate
 
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Smarty638 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 8:15 pm:
this is great! thanks for reading  mine too :) but really...i think everyone can relate to this..i know i can! and thats the best kind of poetry!
 
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sunnyhunny This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 17, 2010 at 4:43 pm:
Just... wow.  That's talent.
 
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GreenActress said...
May 10, 2010 at 5:08 pm:
This is truly amazing. You're so talented! I enjoyed reading it! Keep up the good work! You've got a talent as a writer! Check out some of my work? Thanks! Yours get 5 stars from me!!
 
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CaptainFabulous. said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 4:21 pm:
wow your poem is very powerful
love the title as well
great job
plzz read my workk??
 
holycrackers replied...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 7:00 pm :
wow! deep i've never felt that kind of intense vipe in a poem before
 
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BlackMoonWhiteSky This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 12:35 pm:
Very cool, it has a nice rythm.
 
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katielynn21 said...
Jan. 20, 2010 at 7:37 pm:
this was simply astonishing, this poem took my breath away. If you ever have a free moment i would like to here your comentary on some of my poems.
 
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Emily J. said...
Jan. 20, 2010 at 5:45 pm:
wow I'm speechless from this poem. I love your style of writing. I would love to hear some of your feedback for my poems if you ever have time!
 
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cduke said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 7:00 pm:
That was amazing. I felt like I was really there. It seemed like the world just stopped for a moment, and that moment in time was still, except for the noise. I loved it so much! amazing work :)
 
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MFrancik said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 8:04 pm:
Wow, this is truly incredibly. As I began reading it, I found myself sucked into the rhythm of your words and imagery, even though I didn't fully understand how it all came together until the very end. I love the will and strength in this poem, great job!
 
Prd101 replied...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 12:14 am :
I completely agree! Excelent job, I truely loved it!
 
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krzykrys said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 6:01 pm:
yea its great! congrats, your an awesome writer. . mayb could look at some of mine one time and give me some pointers.
 
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Hallieinthewings said...
Dec. 6, 2009 at 9:03 pm:
Thank you everyone for the encouraging feedback. I love reading and writing poetry; if you ever would like me to look at any of your own writings, let me know ;)
 
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francheeze88 said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 10:38 am:
AMAZING, this is absolutely AMAZING
 
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PurpleMidnight said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 10:15 am:
Wow. This is absolutley outstanding. You have some tremendous writing talents. Your imagery was very captivating. Never stop writing :P
 
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