Your Heart Was My Home Until You Handed Me an Eviction Notice MAG

November 15, 2008
By amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
maybe i know that you'll crave my secure arms someday, but i'll have come across someone who wasn't afraid. and that's why i can't let go.


I removed the layers of blankets from my aching bones
to excavate the secrets that were held together by saliva
in papier-mâché envelopes, only to chew on disappointments
and lie on shards of fragile stained glass that tampered with my flaws,
instead of putting me back together with multicolored duct tape
so gray was only found inside of my body.

I wrung the tears from your sweatshirt and decided it was time
to give it back to you, in exchange for my serpent heart

[barely beating,

barely breathing];
instead of curling inside your stomach and making you
nearly as ill as I had become, just by drinking venomous nectar
and digesting fireflies so a small portion of me would feel alive,
I climbed over your picket fence and let you recline my eyes
in another awkward position to the point where I only chain-smoked
the main exhibits of your aesthetic proportions and declined
every deficiency of the person you truly are,


i. blunt



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on Apr. 3 2015 at 2:40 am
Iamwhoiam17 GOLD, Lake City Fl, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Just be yourself,if you are happy that's all that matter's.

I love this poem. Beautifully written! It is amazing! :) Please take and rate my poetry,I will appreciate it.

on May. 7 2014 at 7:00 pm
deathandlilacs PLATINUM, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
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wow. amazing.

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on Oct. 19 2013 at 12:09 pm
Cypris BRONZE, Cleburne, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
John 3:16 "For God so loved the world, that He gave His only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in Him, should not perish, but have everlasting life."

Wowzerz! How lively!

on Oct. 23 2012 at 12:26 pm
I thought the way you pieced everything together was brilliant, but that you went overboard with the screaming cliches' and the descriptions. You could have just worded it, in a less complex format and I would gotten more out of it. I was tripped up too much on the stunning imagery, but the whole thing is, when you have an overabundance of description in any piece it takes away from the overall tone of the piece itself and loses meaning.

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on Oct. 23 2012 at 10:31 am
andy jones, Odessa, Texas
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candy is good :)

andy jones said...
on Oct. 23 2012 at 10:31 am
andy jones, Odessa, Texas
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hiiii secret boy

andy jones said...
on Oct. 23 2012 at 10:30 am
andy jones, Odessa, Texas
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whos gonna go to that party this weekend :)

andy jones said...
on Oct. 23 2012 at 10:30 am
andy jones, Odessa, Texas
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hi secert boy

andy jones said...
on Oct. 23 2012 at 10:28 am
andy jones, Odessa, Texas
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this was such a good poem even though i didnt read it

on Sep. 9 2012 at 2:29 am
garshongjasmine SILVER, Accra, Other
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Favorite Quote:
happiness resides not in possesions, and not in gold, the feeling of happiness dwells in the soul























-democritus

wow its the most beautiful thing i've read in ages!!! please.. please... im inviting everyone to read my work and say something!!... i'm really anxious to know what you guys think!  

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on May. 22 2012 at 9:28 pm
Buttercupz, Savona, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Why is a raven like a writing desk?"-the mad hatter
"you must be the change you wish to see in the world"-ghandi

Loved it! well written. Maybe you can check some of mine? theyre called "Life." and "Butterfly"

on May. 22 2012 at 4:46 pm
Veracious.Victoria SILVER, Plymouth, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
MAKE S'MORES NOT WARS!

Amazing....

CamCam<3 said...
on Apr. 30 2012 at 10:42 am

Oh my gosh!!! When I was reading your poem I could totally feel what you were feeling! You used amazing metaphors....

I especially loved the beginning when you said "to lie on shards of fragile glass" WOW

I also liked how you broke the poem into stanzas. I think you broke it up at the PERFECT time! Keep on writing, you are AMAZING! :D


jellybean said...
on Apr. 27 2012 at 10:18 am
i.blunt?????????? but loved it

Moee1 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 8 2012 at 1:31 pm
Moee1 BRONZE, Bowie, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
“Hope is a necessity, evaluating the morals of our determination. Love is an opportunity, displaying the occurrence of whom is accepted within you. Intelligence is a desire, it urges ones motives to incline.”-Mohamed Roberts

This is very AMAZING, very keen sense of words used. Please leave a comment on some of my poetry as well please

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on Feb. 24 2012 at 5:08 pm
niner PLATINUM, Hartville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Isn't it funny how you broke my heart, but I still love you with all the pieces?"
"It's easy to stand in a crowd, but it takes courage to stand alone"
"What would you attempt if you knew you could never fail?"

i love the way your words are so thoughtful! it was amazing! PLEASE comment on some of mine! :)

on Feb. 2 2012 at 9:27 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

This is very well done. The images you present are incredibly vivid.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 6:42 pm
Becca_Leigh62442 GOLD, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Tyranny, like hell is not easily conqured; yet we have this consolation with us; the the harder the conflict, the more glorius the triumph.

Amazing, i love the use of these specific words to create a wonerful sense of imagry. I would love it if you could look at any of my poems and give me your feedback.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 4:45 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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whoa, the imagry is intense here..... and definitely a strong concept! please check out my work too!!!

BiBaby BRONZE said...
on Feb. 2 2012 at 11:48 am
BiBaby BRONZE, Bullhead, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
A woman knows the face of the man she loves as a sailor knows the open sea.

i love your imagery: brava!




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