Unconscionable MAG

November 13, 2008
By Anonymous

How should I take it when a young brother calls me out my name?
Talkin' ‘bout I want because of the length of his chain.
How should I feel when you boss me around?
Talkin' 'bout you're a pimp, but you're so lost, you can't be found.
What should I do when all you want from me is my set of measurements?
Talkin' 'bout you want a red bone, a 38, 24, 31.
How should I react when you hand me your gun?
Talkin' 'bout you just want to have some harmless fun.
How do I pick up where I left off?
When I'm doing time for your decisions and another family is mourning over their loss.
This is the story of a gansta's chick, whose Clyde so soon forgets just who got his back.
The one he smacks around, controls her life, causes the utmost amount of confusion and strife.
The one who gave up her intelligence to feed his fifth grade reading level male ego.
The one who was finally let free out of his dangerous clutch.
The one who was remembered by the size of her butt.
The one who finally has a clue as to what to do with her life.
The one whose love has no price.
The one who found her own source of appreciation of her inner beauty.
The one who holds the key to her own destiny, finally.

The author's comments:
Being a young African American female, I have encountered obstacles for which I have had to disprove stereotypes about other African American females. I was inspired by attending a seminar on Hip-Hop and its influences on the culture of Americans. I hope that readers get the idea of continuing on even with stereotypes and others doubting you based on something second-nature such as skin color, or tone. Be strong!

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on Feb. 2 2012 at 2:29 pm
CallMeMeatBall, Banks, Alabama
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YOLO - you only live once!

I love this it's so powerful!

Free- GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 7:26 pm
Free- GOLD, Blllll, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I believe in you and I believe in me, and I believe that we are not meaningless."
"What a waste of a perfectly good wrist."

ughhh this is so beautiful....conveys so much emotions! You are a truly talented writer.

on Dec. 10 2010 at 9:04 am
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
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"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller


Amnoona BRONZE said...
on Oct. 5 2010 at 4:37 pm
Amnoona BRONZE, Bridgeport, Illinois
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Amazing poem! Absolutely love it!

Thankyou! Welldone! :D

on Aug. 20 2010 at 11:55 am
silence-is-loud GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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this is simply beautiful. amazing. powerful


Chaerii<3 said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 1:25 pm
Thank you so much!! Well, this poem isn't about me. I tried to tell a story of females of so many other young women who go through life-threatening abuses from young men. I watch my surroundings and listen to music and created this female character in the poem! Thank you so much again! I'll post some more soon!

on Jun. 11 2010 at 5:08 pm
hayhay14 BRONZE, Mcrae, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
live life to the foolist

wow u are amazing that is powerfull it tells the story of so many people

on May. 30 2010 at 10:01 am
Patience97 PLATINUM, New Tripoli, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"People believe that if we really want to eliminate something, focus on that. How much sense does it make for us to give the particular problem all of the energy, as opposed to focusing on trust, love, living in abundance, education, or peace? -Un.

Wow... your writing style is spectucular. Never let anyone force you to do something that you don't want to do. But I can't figure out if it's your boyfriend, brother, or dad... I like that because the poem makes you wonder what the relation between the girl and this male was. This is written so well. Great job :)

"People will never remember exactly what you said, but they will remember how you made them feel."

on Apr. 12 2010 at 5:01 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Omg. This is so powerful. I love it. I absolutely love it. Adore it. This makes me feel...strong and proud of who I am. Keep writing. You have great talent.


And if you have time, please check out my work. Ratings are GREATLY appreciated. Thanks! :)

on Mar. 1 2010 at 6:08 pm
miz.pretty.yung.thang SILVER, Fortmill, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The love that lasts the longest is the love that is never returned

i love this poem u r very talented

kankan BRONZE said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 8:44 pm
kankan BRONZE, Lowell, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh as much as you breathe
Love as long as you live

This is so amazing. Gave me goosebumps

on Jan. 15 2010 at 6:02 pm
DestinyMartinez PLATINUM, Boca Raton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Never know that you love someone untill they're gone."

Wow, this is really good. I love the detail in this. You’re a great writer. You should really check out some of my writing I think you will like it. Our writing is similar in a way. Please comment and rate too. Thank you.

on Dec. 23 2009 at 1:04 am
ShakingChandeliers SILVER, N.Highlands, California
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Favorite Quote:
"A thin layer of trust had formed in my mind, like a scab."

"I preferred albums to the more modern eight tracks. Albums came with sleeves which reminded me of clean underwear."
-Augusten Burroughs

wow, sounds ike you've been truly restored. Right on, girl!

eMs23 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 24 2009 at 5:33 pm
eMs23 BRONZE, Yuma, Arizona
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awesome! totally unique never read a poem like it.

Allie2323 said...
on Aug. 22 2009 at 10:56 pm
Loved it.

Sunshineyday said...
on Aug. 22 2009 at 7:48 pm
very good. effectively made your point

Amanda BRONZE said...
on Aug. 14 2009 at 7:14 pm
Amanda BRONZE, Rehoboth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
O God, I could be bounded in a nutshell, and count myself a king of infinite space—were it not that I have bad dreams. {Hamlet}


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