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A Play On A Play On Words This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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laxgirl9 said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 6:49 pm:
absolutley beautiful :)
 
emilybwrites replied...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 7:59 pm :
wow....wow....wow! this was great please check out my poem "forgotten Domain" and comment and rate it i would love some feedback:) thanks!
 
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GirlWhoWrote said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 3:25 pm:
wow this is very good! I love the title. Annnnnddd... check out my work? :)
 
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MsAnonymous This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 12:36 pm:
I love this poem because you put feeling into it. It made me think. I don't comprehend it completely, but I like it that way because it makes it personal to you and mysterious to the reader.
 
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youngspeare said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 9:29 am:
Very good :) The title itself is awesome.
Check out my work please!
 
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awensman95 said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 12:46 am:

I especially love your metaphors! :) keep it up!

 

 
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iluvrockandroll2 said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 9:07 pm:

this is amazin!!

what ever u do,keep writing :)

 
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emilybwrites said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 8:24 pm:
wow fantastic!!!! would everyone please check out my poem "Forgotten Domain" and rate and comment on it?? thanks! and great job aagain:)
 
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ashleyn said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 5:14 pm:

This is really good!! I love your word choice and voice! Job well done! (:

 

 
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aurorairis said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 2:23 pm:

Wow! This is my favoite piece ever!! I all the different literary devices you used!! Amazing!

Please check out some of my poems!

 
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AlwaysDanceInTheRain said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 2:04 pm:
Are you kidding me? I totally wrote a poem JUST like this like two weeks ago but didn't post it... Looks like you beat me to it! :) Great job!
 
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TheWhiteFlower said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 11:48 am:

this is very inspiring

good job!!!!!

 
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T.A.Wieczorek said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 7:30 am:
This was a really inspiring poem. I'm glad it got into the mag! I'm brand new to Teen Ink but this poem alone has inspired my own writing. I'll have it posted soon if you wanted to look and see. :)
 
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buns itbn said...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 11:51 am:

this book fabulose it makes me CRAZYYYYYYY  ITS FABOO NOW WHO EVER WROTE THIS NEEDS TO PUCKER UP BUTTER CUP

 

 
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lonelyLaviathin said...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 11:10 am:
bad a**... defiantley my new favorite line of a poem is "across the aluminum foor of my mind"...bravo. encore??
 
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CandyGirl636 said...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 5:08 am:
This is amazing. Your a great writer. Keep it up darlin. :)
 
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charlie24 said...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 5:00 am:
like bken 24 i would like to shake your hand but i am on the opposite side of the world so i am just going to have to say WELL DONE, THAT WAS AMAZING!
 
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AristotlesApprentice said...
Sept. 28, 2011 at 11:18 pm:
This is a very good and deep poem. I believe you show i sense of rebelliousness, if thats even a word, saying how you would like to drown when almost 70% of people in the world have the fear of drowing. Also I believe you are presenting a sense of how you want to be different, when you said, "head upon my hat, and feet upon my shoes". Then in the end, you portray sadness when you said, "all you are is a blurred image, thoughts once clear are now hard to see....still leaves me empty inside" 
 
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Anonymous_7 said...
Sept. 28, 2011 at 10:28 pm:
This was awesome! You are a great writer, Keep it up!
 
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marissa87 said...
Sept. 6, 2011 at 5:19 pm:
wow you are a really good writer!!! this is awesome excellent job!!
 
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