A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Dec. 3 2011 at 7:59 pm
emilybwrites SILVER, Villa Hills, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

wow....wow....wow! this was great please check out my poem "forgotten Domain" and comment and rate it i would love some feedback:) thanks!

on Dec. 3 2011 at 6:49 pm
laxgirl9 BRONZE, Indianapolis, Indiana
1 article 0 photos 5 comments
absolutley beautiful :)

on Dec. 3 2011 at 3:25 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 47 comments
wow this is very good! I love the title. Annnnnddd... check out my work? :)

on Dec. 3 2011 at 12:36 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
108 articles 2 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the Lamb at the center of the throne will be their Shepherd. He will guide them to springs of living water; and God will wipe away every tear from their eyes." Revelation 7:17

I love this poem because you put feeling into it. It made me think. I don't comprehend it completely, but I like it that way because it makes it personal to you and mysterious to the reader.

on Dec. 3 2011 at 9:29 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
1 article 0 photos 273 comments

Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

Very good :) The title itself is awesome.
Check out my work please!

on Dec. 3 2011 at 12:46 am
awensman95 SILVER, Alexandria, Minnesota
7 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All dreams come true if we have the courage to pursue them." - Walt Disney

I especially love your metaphors! :) keep it up!

 


on Nov. 11 2011 at 9:07 pm

this is amazin!!

what ever u do,keep writing :)


on Nov. 11 2011 at 8:24 pm
emilybwrites SILVER, Villa Hills, Kentucky
5 articles 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

wow fantastic!!!! would everyone please check out my poem "Forgotten Domain" and rate and comment on it?? thanks! and great job aagain:)

on Nov. 11 2011 at 5:14 pm
ashleyn PLATINUM, Zeeland, Michigan
39 articles 2 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't take life to seriously, nobody makes it out alive anyways"-Unknown

This is really good!! I love your word choice and voice! Job well done! (:

 


on Nov. 11 2011 at 2:23 pm
aurorairis SILVER, Darien, Connecticut
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Wow! This is my favoite piece ever!! I all the different literary devices you used!! Amazing!

Please check out some of my poems!


on Nov. 11 2011 at 2:04 pm
AlwaysDanceInTheRain SILVER, Sidney, Nebraska
8 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything happens for a reason.

Are you kidding me? I totally wrote a poem JUST like this like two weeks ago but didn't post it... Looks like you beat me to it! :) Great job!

on Nov. 11 2011 at 11:48 am
TheWhiteFlower BRONZE, Greenville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
No man can be called friendless who has God and the companionship of good books. ~Elizabeth Barrett Browning

this is very inspiring

good job!!!!!


on Nov. 11 2011 at 7:30 am
T.A.Wieczorek BRONZE, Galien, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments
This was a really inspiring poem. I'm glad it got into the mag! I'm brand new to Teen Ink but this poem alone has inspired my own writing. I'll have it posted soon if you wanted to look and see. :)

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on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:51 am

this book fabulose it makes me CRAZYYYYYYY  ITS FABOO NOW WHO EVER WROTE THIS NEEDS TO PUCKER UP BUTTER CUP

 


on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:10 am
deleteddeletedFoff, Columbus, Ohio
0 articles 0 photos 53 comments
bad a**... defiantley my new favorite line of a poem is "across the aluminum foor of my mind"...bravo. encore??

on Oct. 20 2011 at 5:08 am
CandyGirl636 GOLD, Searsport, Maine
11 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a lot of faverote quotes.......
LOVE PEACE AND CHICKEN GREESE <3
HAKUNA MATATA
NEVER LET THE FEAR OF STRIKNIG OUT KEEP YOU FROM PLAYING THE GAME.
Pain is weekness levaving ones body.
I'm not random you just cant think as fast as me.

This is amazing. Your a great writer. Keep it up darlin. :)

FULLSTOP GOLD said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 5:00 am
FULLSTOP GOLD, Skipton, North Yorkshire, Other
13 articles 7 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
forever and ever and ever and ever will never be enough

like bken 24 i would like to shake your hand but i am on the opposite side of the world so i am just going to have to say WELL DONE, THAT WAS AMAZING!

on Sep. 28 2011 at 11:18 pm
AristotlesApprentice, Moultrie, Georgia
0 articles 0 photos 8 comments
This is a very good and deep poem. I believe you show i sense of rebelliousness, if thats even a word, saying how you would like to drown when almost 70% of people in the world have the fear of drowing. Also I believe you are presenting a sense of how you want to be different, when you said, "head upon my hat, and feet upon my shoes". Then in the end, you portray sadness when you said, "all you are is a blurred image, thoughts once clear are now hard to see....still leaves me empty inside" 

on Sep. 28 2011 at 10:28 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

This was awesome! You are a great writer, Keep it up!

on Sep. 6 2011 at 5:19 pm
marissa87 BRONZE, Glenmoore, Pennsylvania
4 articles 3 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
what is popular is not always right and what is right is not always popular

wow you are a really good writer!!! this is awesome excellent job!!


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