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A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
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Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
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\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

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When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

© Lydia E., Escondido, CA

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muna.najihah PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 11 2011 at 11:49 am
muna.najihah PLATINUM, Malacca, Other
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if life was given two choices, to become a writer or a character, I will choose to become a writer.
I have the power to decide what my life should be.

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when i go through it once, i don't really get it.

after reading it again, i understand just how beautiful it means. love it

emilybwrites SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 7:59 pm
emilybwrites SILVER, Villa Hills, Kentucky
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last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

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wow....wow....wow! this was great please check out my poem "forgotten Domain" and comment and rate it i would love some feedback:) thanks!
laxgirl9 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 6:49 pm
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absolutley beautiful :)
SophieG. SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 3:25 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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wow this is very good! I love the title. Annnnnddd... check out my work? :)
Plain-Jane ELITE said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 12:36 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
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I love this poem because you put feeling into it. It made me think. I don't comprehend it completely, but I like it that way because it makes it personal to you and mysterious to the reader.
youngspeare BRONZE said...
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Very good :) The title itself is awesome.
Check out my work please!
awensman95 SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 12:46 am
awensman95 SILVER, Alexandria, Minnesota
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I especially love your metaphors! :) keep it up!

 

iluvrockandroll2 said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 9:07 pm

this is amazin!!

what ever u do,keep writing :)

emilybwrites SILVER said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 8:24 pm
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last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

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wow fantastic!!!! would everyone please check out my poem "Forgotten Domain" and rate and comment on it?? thanks! and great job aagain:)
ashleyn PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 5:14 pm
ashleyn PLATINUM, Zeeland, Michigan
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This is really good!! I love your word choice and voice! Job well done! (:

 

aurorairis SILVER said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 2:23 pm
aurorairis SILVER, Darien, Connecticut
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Wow! This is my favoite piece ever!! I all the different literary devices you used!! Amazing!

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AlwaysDanceInTheRain SILVER said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 2:04 pm
AlwaysDanceInTheRain SILVER, Sidney, Nebraska
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Are you kidding me? I totally wrote a poem JUST like this like two weeks ago but didn't post it... Looks like you beat me to it! :) Great job!
TheWhiteFlower BRONZE said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 11:48 am
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this is very inspiring

good job!!!!!

T.A.Wieczorek BRONZE said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 7:30 am
T.A.Wieczorek BRONZE, Galien, Michigan
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This was a really inspiring poem. I'm glad it got into the mag! I'm brand new to Teen Ink but this poem alone has inspired my own writing. I'll have it posted soon if you wanted to look and see. :)
buns itbn said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:51 am

this book fabulose it makes me CRAZYYYYYYY  ITS FABOO NOW WHO EVER WROTE THIS NEEDS TO PUCKER UP BUTTER CUP

 

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on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:10 am
deleteddeletedFoff, Columbus, Ohio
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bad a**... defiantley my new favorite line of a poem is "across the aluminum foor of my mind"...bravo. encore??
CandyGirl636 GOLD said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 5:08 am
CandyGirl636 GOLD, Searsport, Maine
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I have a lot of faverote quotes.......
LOVE PEACE AND CHICKEN GREESE <3
HAKUNA MATATA
NEVER LET THE FEAR OF STRIKNIG OUT KEEP YOU FROM PLAYING THE GAME.
Pain is weekness levaving ones body.
I'm not random you just cant think as fast as me.

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This is amazing. Your a great writer. Keep it up darlin. :)
FULLSTOP GOLD said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 5:00 am
FULLSTOP GOLD, Skipton, North Yorkshire, Other
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forever and ever and ever and ever will never be enough

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like bken 24 i would like to shake your hand but i am on the opposite side of the world so i am just going to have to say WELL DONE, THAT WAS AMAZING!
AristotlesApprentice said...
on Sep. 28 2011 at 11:18 pm
AristotlesApprentice, Moultrie, Georgia
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This is a very good and deep poem. I believe you show i sense of rebelliousness, if thats even a word, saying how you would like to drown when almost 70% of people in the world have the fear of drowing. Also I believe you are presenting a sense of how you want to be different, when you said, "head upon my hat, and feet upon my shoes". Then in the end, you portray sadness when you said, "all you are is a blurred image, thoughts once clear are now hard to see....still leaves me empty inside" 
Anonymous_7 SILVER said...
on Sep. 28 2011 at 10:28 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
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This was awesome! You are a great writer, Keep it up!