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A Play On A Play On Words This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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sumthingprecious said...
Jan. 15, 2010 at 6:04 pm:
Wow, this is really good. I love the detail in this. You’re a great writer. You should really check out some of my writing I think you will like it. Our writing is similar in a way. Please comment and rate too. Thank you.
 
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Only,I This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 10:12 pm:
<3
I love this.
 
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ShakingChandeliers said...
Dec. 23, 2009 at 1:45 am:
I simple. love it :)
 
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maddie1319 said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 11:22 pm:
This is really brilliant amazing work
 
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iloveusher said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 3:34 pm:
I thought tis was a great poem.
 
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EternalSunshine said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 4:36 pm:
I really, really like this! My favorite lines are "no one makes a sound except the pitter patter of my soul across the aluminum roof of my mind." What a beautiful poem, keep it up:)
 
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francheeze88 said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 10:35 am:
this is amazing. the past part is from "the pitter patter of my soul" to "'cause I think its my fault"
but its all really good. really good
 
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yaelephant5 said...
Oct. 25, 2009 at 12:04 am:
amazing, because i know im gonna have to read it again and again to understand all the nuances
 
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nancy! said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 6:08 pm:
this is very intrigging....
 
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MissLeaDee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 5:22 pm:
"no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind"
What a lovely poem. =]
 
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NerdsCANBEpoetry said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 4:26 pm:
Beautiful wording. Keep writing i think the world needs more writers
 
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Liz W. said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 3:12 pm:
very nice!
 
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DEARtiffanyy said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 1:55 pm:
This is just...WOW. (:
keep it up.
 
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lauren_b said...
Oct. 2, 2009 at 4:57 pm:
Realy great poem. I love when i see artists coming to life.
 
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lovehate29This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 2, 2009 at 11:33 am:
I like this piece. You use beautiful imagery in it. Great job!
 
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Brittface said...
Sept. 30, 2009 at 10:18 am:
wow this is straight genius! i've never read anything like this. the play on words is cool :) haha and i love the title. it's perfect. i wish i could write like this..
 
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Sarah U. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 22, 2009 at 10:10 pm:
that is beautiful, where did the ispiration come from?
 
Andrew R. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 24, 2009 at 12:41 pm :
Oh wow... it's been awhile I'm not sure if I remember... but, most of my poetry is just like one thought that I take and spin it around in my head until it comes out poetic... haha
 
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Blue-eyed hippychick said...
Mar. 28, 2009 at 9:32 pm:
I liked it the first time i read it. I loved it the second time. Thank you for posting it where I can read it. I could never post my stuff I am to shy. I really enjoyed reading it. Please keep writing and sharing
 
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lostinbooks said...
Mar. 16, 2009 at 3:58 am:
Beautiful. I think I often think like that, with similies. It really captures the feeling. A bit confusing on the first read, but after that, it is just and excellent work.
 
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