A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Mar. 27 2010 at 4:01 pm
LittleMissWhimsical SILVER, Saginaw, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I wonder about all roads not taken and am moved to quote Frost...but won't. It is sad to be able only to mouth other poets. I want someone to mouth me." Miss Sylvia Plath

You're so good! Love it!

on Mar. 27 2010 at 8:33 am
Tha1Chick BRONZE, Stuart, Florida
1 article 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
You heffer! or HOLY HEFFA!

that waz amazingg!

on Mar. 19 2010 at 3:18 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
1 article 0 photos 29 comments
This was awesome dude, felt a real connection to it..

skyler SILVER said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 9:22 pm
skyler SILVER, Tayllorsville, Utah
8 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
live to love and love to live

Im deffinately not surprised this was published i mean the deep thought that went on to this is phenomenal verry good work

Riley141 GOLD said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 4:08 pm
Riley141 GOLD, Yale, Michigan
13 articles 3 photos 145 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Always do right. This will gratifiy some people and astonish the rest." Mark Twain

Hey! This was realy good you should keep writing.

Penelope GOLD said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 2:55 pm
Penelope GOLD, Hillsborough, New Jersey
13 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
There comes a time when you have to stop thinking of yourself as the main character in your own story, but as the suppporting character in someone else's story.

I think that was kind of sad and haunting and a really accurate picture of someone waiting for things to change. A lot of people can probably relate to this.

on Mar. 5 2010 at 2:49 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments
hey can you check out some of my new poems i just put on.?

Earth is falling

the truth

result

holocaust

[cheers]

i was thinking...

impossible to answer

does anyone really know?

we will pay

speak up

snippits

on Mar. 5 2010 at 2:08 pm
Lovemyhollowbody BRONZE, Newtown, Connecticut
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I Love You"

"pitter patter of my soul against the aluminum roof of my mind" -genious

on Mar. 5 2010 at 10:38 am
respecturself7 SILVER, Medina, New York
8 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is a natural law in life to settle.....I broke that law ~Katherine Hepburn
Love, Is the severest of mental diseases~U.K.
Spinning always spinning....when life puts me down I'll give you a call~respecturself7

That was absolutely amazing! a truly beautiful reflection of the soul.

on Mar. 5 2010 at 5:17 am
xxhollyxx BRONZE, Perth, Other
1 article 14 photos 58 comments
This is an amazing poem xD

and you must be a pretty amazing person to be able to write something so beautiful :)

on Feb. 11 2010 at 6:56 pm
Callaghan PLATINUM, Medford, Massachusetts
41 articles 8 photos 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.
-Marcus Zusak, The Book Thief

OMG! that was just...wow, I'm speechless. I...wow...just WOW!

on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:18 pm
sammyso3 SILVER, Hastings, Nebraska
9 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We have to be continually jumping off cliffs and developing our wings on the way down." Kurt Vonnegut

I love the ending. Congrats.

on Feb. 11 2010 at 3:51 pm
Crossingmyfingers SILVER, Mounds View, Minnesota
9 articles 6 photos 11 comments
I don't really know what to say about this... but I really, really liked it. It was really reflective and pure.

on Feb. 11 2010 at 11:02 am
violingoddess GOLD, Mesa, Arizona
10 articles 9 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
It ain't bad being good
when you feel like you can no longer stand- get on your knees
Curiousity is the mother of discovery

wow, this is really amazing... keep up the good work :D

on Feb. 11 2010 at 9:22 am
Lucy4himnotu ELITE, Richardson, Texas
148 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am Happy to The Point of Fear" -Ralph Waldo Emmerson

the rhythm you have attached to these words, has the "ebb and flow" of the ocean. very well done. beautiful.

jeanwolf GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 12:29 am
jeanwolf GOLD, Lodi, California
14 articles 11 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Eternity is forever, falsehood is a never

two words "love it"

on Feb. 9 2010 at 6:55 pm
Stephanie.Marie GOLD, Manasss, Virginia
10 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you wasted life why wouldn't you waste the after life" modest mouse.

So as i was reading this and I kinda felt pulled into the poem i guess. I liked it alot. I like how it tied in at the end.

Lilly101911 said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 7:25 pm
Lilly101911, Windham, Vermont
0 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"apologizing is like whiteout. it covers up mistakes but it never really goes away"-a friend

"She may not be thinking about you every second of the day, but she will give you a part of her that she knows you can break - her heart." -Bob Marley

I think that that was so beautiful!

I got lost in the words!

you are very talented!!!

on Jan. 20 2010 at 4:50 pm
justsmile164 BRONZE, New York, New York
4 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Talent is nothing without character."

this was really fun to read. what made you think of writing this?

on Jan. 20 2010 at 12:21 am
justkasey SILVER, Oak Grove, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These violent delights have violent ends And in their triumph die, like fire and powder, Which as they kiss, consume." -William Shakespere (Romeo and Juliet)

I love the way it flows, how it goes about from one saying to the next. Incredible!


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