A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Oct. 6 2012 at 4:01 pm
GraphicWriter DIAMOND, Yuba City, California
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This is a true poem of someone strong, a sonnet almost of a strong heart pulling ahead.

on Oct. 6 2012 at 1:44 pm
RedFeather GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
Prose is like walking but poetry is like dancing.
—Paul Valery, poet (1871 - 1945)

Awesome poem! It's really deep and well-written. If you have a moment, could you do me the favor of checking out my poem How it Ends and give some critique?

on Sep. 27 2012 at 10:01 am
livingdeadgirl1995 SILVER, Newport News, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter what language we speak, we all smile in the same language. :)

I can tell you are strong. :)

Roper GOLD said...
on Aug. 23 2012 at 8:02 am
Roper GOLD, Krum, Texas
17 articles 11 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What a boy can do, A girl can do better"

Truly amazing!

mongooseman0 said...
on Aug. 1 2012 at 9:48 am
mongooseman0, Bristol, Other
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Its always darkest before the dawn. (Florence and the Machine, Shake it Out)

like it! very beautiful and free!

. said...
on Jul. 10 2012 at 6:56 pm
this poem is beautiful, keep writing

on Jul. 10 2012 at 3:34 pm
andnowIcanspeak GOLD, San Gabriel, California
12 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony.”

amazing 

on Jul. 10 2012 at 3:45 am
LongLazyDays55 BRONZE, Other, Other
3 articles 0 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
I haven't failed. I just haven't found 10,000 ways that won't work. [Thomas Edison]

When words fail, music speaks.

I think this is......AWESOME! It's a very deep and meaningful poem and I loved reading it. I especially liked this part,"with a head apon my hat and feet apon my shoes." :D Keep writing! :)

on Jun. 18 2012 at 8:29 pm
TMarie42 SILVER, Orland, California
7 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
Pulvis et umbra sumus.

Wow! Totally amazing. Love it.

on Jun. 18 2012 at 8:03 pm
MayaaMagdy BRONZE, Nasr City, Other
1 article 0 photos 8 comments

i love it 

 


on Jun. 18 2012 at 12:11 pm
Shelbi Franks BRONZE, Muskegon, Michigan
3 articles 1 photo 2 comments
This was amazing. The first 4 lines were my absolute favorite.

LCMyers13 GOLD said...
on May. 27 2012 at 10:39 pm
LCMyers13 GOLD, Madison, Mississippi
10 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A painter paints pictures on canvas. But musicians paint their pictures on silence."-Leopold Stokowski.

Wow. That was a privelege to read. It's rare to come across poems that speak this deeply to one's soul. Thank you and keep on writing.

KylieK GOLD said...
on May. 27 2012 at 3:52 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
11 articles 0 photos 270 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

Oh my goodness, I LOVE YOU!

 

Lol, just kidding! No, that made me cry! Amazing job! Dug straight to my soul. I'm thoroughly impressed!


EeBRA BRONZE said...
on May. 27 2012 at 1:02 am
EeBRA BRONZE, Mattapan, Massachusetts
2 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't count the days, make the days count." Mohamed Ali

one word AMAZING,,,wow,,, and you stick to the main point

EeBRA BRONZE said...
on May. 27 2012 at 1:02 am
EeBRA BRONZE, Mattapan, Massachusetts
2 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't count the days, make the days count." Mohamed Ali

one word AMAZING,,,wow,,, and you stick to the main point

on Apr. 28 2012 at 11:21 pm
JackieH PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
36 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't break character, you've got a lot of heart. ~ The Killers

WOW this is fantastic!!

on Apr. 13 2012 at 7:34 pm
Bookworm1998 GOLD, Brampton, Other
17 articles 2 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
Preserve your memories, keep them well; what you forget, you can never retell.

this was such a great poem to read, seeing as poetry isn't what i usually ceom here for - irragardless, it's amazing!

on Apr. 13 2012 at 7:01 am
MarieAntoinette2014 DIAMOND, Scottsburg, Indiana
54 articles 2 photos 238 comments

Favorite Quote:
Isn't it ironic? We ignore the ones who adore us, adore the ones who ignore us, love the ones who hurt us, and hurt the ones that love us.

That's an amazing mental picture. It's powerful!

on Mar. 22 2012 at 6:55 pm
Swims.M.V. GOLD, Albuquerque, New Mexico
11 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you're not practicing, somebody else is, somewhere, and he'll be ready to take your job."
-Brooks Robinson

B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L. :D I loved it

hypermagical said...
on Mar. 22 2012 at 4:08 pm
hypermagical, Indianapolis, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
You can quote me on that.

You've brought tears to my eyes... it's kind of embarrassing, I'm in a public library for goodness' sake.

Haha, seriously though this is beautiful!



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