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A Cool Wednesday Evening MAG

November 12, 2008
By SaraMae BRONZE, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
SaraMae BRONZE, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
4 articles 2 photos 2 comments

So here we are
on this cool Wednesday evening.
Finding new scars
and realizing how deceiving you are.
So here we are
your guilty pleas
after you lied to my face.
Please, proceed.
Go on,
on with your rambles blanketed with lies.
I’m not up for the chase anymore.
So here we are
on this cool Wednesday evening.
Splitting apart.
It’s like ping pong.
Words cutting our souls,
back and forth.
We cannot even remember the start.
And this is where we are.
Going our separate ways,
on this cool Wednesday evening.


The author's comments:
One day I decided I wanted to write a poem. It had been a Wednesday and I guess I wanted to include that day into the poem. And I did.

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J.A.L. GOLD said...
on Oct. 6 2014 at 3:50 pm
J.A.L. GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
13 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Because our addictions are our distractions."

This poem has style, it has a mind of its own. Good job!

on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:16 am
deleteddeletedFoff, Columbus, Ohio
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i like the form of it...very simple, yet to the point. keep writing. bravo

 


on Jul. 13 2011 at 2:36 am
dancer11srubin GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
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I felt everything you wrote. 

on Jun. 4 2011 at 1:13 am
GonnaBeaDiamond BRONZE, Grovetown, Georgia
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

"one day i decided to write a poem"

And it was absolutely amazing. Most people write for a long time to do what I assume you did on a whim. congratulations.  (:


on Jan. 23 2011 at 9:15 pm
BitterSweet1993 SILVER, Bronx, New York
5 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is only a dirty trick played on us to achieve continuation of the species. ~W. Somerset Maugham, A Writer's Notebook, 1949

Lovely <3

roxygirl14 said...
on Dec. 11 2010 at 6:20 pm

nicce

 


on Nov. 24 2010 at 2:59 pm
Sabrina1234 BRONZE, Jefferson City, Missouri
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you're not first, you're last." -Ricky Bobby

I love the beginning. It's reeaaalllly good :)

on Oct. 10 2010 at 6:05 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller

This is a really great poem...i love it. such strong emotion packed into such few words that takes talent! check out some of my work? thanks so much for posting

on Aug. 28 2010 at 10:17 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

inspiration can deifintely come from anything... great stuff... read some of mine?

on Feb. 25 2010 at 9:24 am
mandielynnrose GOLD, Tucson, Arizona
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I, I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

This is the absolute most closest relation I've had to a poem since Ive been on here this is an absolute awesome poem and I hope to hear more from you! Great randomness! lol

on Jan. 15 2010 at 6:08 pm
DestinyMartinez PLATINUM, Boca Raton, Florida
23 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never know that you love someone untill they're gone."

Wow, this is really good. I love the detail in this. You’re a great writer. You should really check out some of my writing I think you will like it. Our writing is similar in a way. Please comment and rate too. Thank you.

on Sep. 7 2009 at 2:58 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
26 articles 0 photos 493 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This is nice, I love the imagery, and the way you repeated the line 'so here we are on this cool wednesday evening'. It just brought context to the poem.

saher BRONZE said...
on Aug. 26 2009 at 1:56 pm
saher BRONZE, East Windsor, Connecticut
1 article 27 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Develop success from failures. Discouragement and failure are two of the surest stepping stones to success.
Dale Carnegie

Awasomeee!

DW SILVER said...
on Aug. 15 2009 at 12:25 am
DW SILVER, Denver, Colorado
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i LOVE the begining! good job!

hannah=(= said...
on Aug. 14 2009 at 8:24 pm
hannah=(=, Ossian, Indiana
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very nice.

on Aug. 14 2009 at 1:13 pm
FlamableFyre DIAMOND, Spartanburg, South Carolina
93 articles 9 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have ambitions or desires.
Being a poet isn't my ambition,
it's my way of being alone.
~ Fernando Pessoa ~

i know how that feels. wow, you made it feel like i was right there, i could see it clearly in my head, wonderful!

on Jun. 8 2009 at 7:32 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is truly amazing. I really love it! Great job.

on Nov. 18 2008 at 3:05 pm
This is probably my favorite so far, and I've read around eight pages fool. Very good. :D

EMUHLEEEEEE said...
on Nov. 16 2008 at 2:16 am
sara, i happen to think you are talented as EVURR =]