Roses

Silky smooth petals adorn the salient thorn
Yet if you look behind the grace you'll find the rose will scorn

Its easy to mistake me for something angelic
But if you look inside You'll find not much to relic





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itsyourmaingirl said...
Nov. 25, 2014 at 10:55 pm
this whole thing is amazing and very well written!
 
Midnight5765 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 23, 2014 at 6:28 pm
Great imagrey, it was like the rose was in my hand! I like how you used the first stanza to compare yourself to in the next. I think you should or can make this into a very nice haiku (2 or more of course) since you have so much rythmn and precise writting pattern here. Definatley a good double endenre, keep writing!
 
taliamaee said...
May 28, 2014 at 9:21 pm
this is so pretty! i love the rhyme scheme, haha. it's written so beautifully and i can feel the emotion:)
 
ImmortalRose replied...
Nov. 11, 2014 at 1:54 pm
Thank you!
 
ansem_unlimited said...
Mar. 23, 2014 at 5:57 pm
I like how it's short, elagent and well worded, very nice.
 
ImmortalRose replied...
Nov. 11, 2014 at 1:54 pm
Thank you!
 
Janelle7 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 20, 2014 at 7:58 pm
this is a beautiful and deep poem! I love it!
 
Rosalynne replied...
Mar. 20, 2014 at 8:03 pm
Thank you so much!!!
 
WinterRose1976 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 18, 2014 at 11:44 am
The first half of your poem is perfect. It flows extremely well and is beautifully written. The second part isn't as eloquent, but it's still amazingly good. I really like it!
 
Rosalynne replied...
Mar. 18, 2014 at 12:52 pm
Thank you so much! I agree. I could have done better on the second half... Do you know how I can edit my pieces?
 
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