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November 12, 2008
By Kelly M., Mineola, NY, Mineola, NY

Anger bubbles up beneath my skin;
I grin,
then push my lips out
in frustration
when he turns
away.

My nose prickles hard on the inside
and I swallow hard,
willing the tears not to come,
but they do not heed.
The briny water wells up
on the cusp of my lashline,
threatening to fall
to give me away.
I feel the first drop slip over the edge and glide softly
down my cheek onto my lower lip,
which trembles.
Its saltiness coats the single word
on my tongue
that fidgets,
waiting to launch itself into the open air
in vain
like so many times before.
Listen.



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MRose911 GOLD said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 9:59 pm
MRose911 GOLD, Paradise, Utah
17 articles 10 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No boy is worth crying over and the one who is won't make you cry." - Sarah Kane

This. Is. Amazing! Wow!! You have a seriously good talent! :)

Dren12 said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 6:43 am
Dren12, Brevard, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't love me at my worst, then you don't deserve me at my best"

great poem...it makes you feel and see everything your describing...

on Oct. 27 2010 at 10:23 pm
SideraCaeli GOLD, Marysville, Washington
13 articles 1 photo 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be yourself. Above all, let who you are, what you are, what you believe, shine through every sentence you write, every piece you finish.” -John Jakes.

This is good. It goes very smoothly throughout. Good job. It's very descriptive which I like

MiriamH said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 4:24 pm
MiriamH, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
“I just want someone to hear what I have to say. And maybe if I talk long enough, it’ll make sense.”

I like the idea of this poem, and you have incredible description, but the end doesnt match the beginning very well in my opinion.

on Oct. 25 2010 at 4:15 pm
Poet_in_Motion PLATINUM, Sharon, Massachusetts
24 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love one another." –George Harrison (his last words)

"and down they forgot as up they grew" –e.e. cummings

"The sea is just a wetter version of the sky..." –Regina Spektor

I love this so much. The wording and the imagery just enhance its beauty. You are very talented! :)  <3

ffaprez said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 11:37 am
I  really injoyed this! I felt as if it reached out and tugged at my heart! Good Job!

on Oct. 3 2010 at 9:18 pm
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

Oo...very nice..I like how it has me going from one line to the other easily :)

Neta613 GOLD said...
on Oct. 3 2010 at 12:54 pm
Neta613 GOLD, Highland Park, New Jersey
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Amazing, very well written, good flow, and very, very plausible!

on Oct. 3 2010 at 10:43 am
Writer4Life_21 SILVER, No Where, Maryland
5 articles 2 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't know where your going, you will end up someplace else." - Yogi Bera

I loved it. There was a lot of description.

nancyyy BRONZE said...
on Sep. 14 2010 at 7:37 am
nancyyy BRONZE, Spotsylvania, Virginia
2 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The bigger the dreams, the smaller the competition"

Written so well with descriptive imagery. I like the way each word seems to be wrapped in emotion. Makes me think of how difficult it can be to hide what you are feeling.

on Sep. 12 2010 at 12:01 am
Msrbl@Bst BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Love is the opiate of the universe.

imagery is phenomenal (:

on Sep. 11 2010 at 7:46 pm
SaMiLoVe97 SILVER, Okawville, Illinois
9 articles 3 photos 105 comments

Favorite Quote:
If it doesnt break your heart it isnt love, if it doesnt break your heart its not enough. Its when youre breaking down with your insides coming out.Thats when you learn what youre made of.-Switchfoot<3

Very simple, and yet so much meaning. I loved it(:

on Sep. 11 2010 at 3:16 pm
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
"Nobody can go back and make a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending." -Maria Robinson

wow! this is amazing i love it!

reg93 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 11 2010 at 11:55 am
reg93 BRONZE, Billings, Montana
2 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, and leaves before she is left."
— Marilyn Monroe

This poem is amazing! You have some skills! (:

on Sep. 10 2010 at 4:35 pm
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
52 articles 0 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
-The Dead Tossed Waves.

really enjoyed this:) the simplicity and meaning. and great imagery btw.

id love for you, and anyone else, to check out some of my work as well:)


mego95 GOLD said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 6:36 pm
mego95 GOLD, Colorado Spgs., Colorado
11 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
God blessed you with this life, make sure you live it

This is a really great poem. It's totally the way I feel right now and I love poems about emotions :) Great job!

on Aug. 20 2010 at 10:55 pm
BekkahsLoopy GOLD, San Jose, California
10 articles 4 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep looking forward; don't look back."
"To the world, you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world."

i can really visualize this, which makes it all the more effective. good job and keep it up!!! can you read over some of mine? XD

on Aug. 20 2010 at 3:09 pm
BlindSamurai GOLD, Bridgewater, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
A man who stands for nothing will fall for anything.
-Malcolm X

The description and imagery in this poem is really powerful, excellent for visualizing what you're saying. Good work!

Oh, and please check out my poetry as well!


BABe724 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 3:18 pm
BABe724 BRONZE, Kaukauna, Wisconsin
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...It's not to late it's never to late. No one will ever see the side reflected and if there's something wrong who would have guessed it..."

u r an awesome writer

on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:03 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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this is so amazing and descriptive! i feel like alot of people can relate. keep writing!


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