A Day At War MAG

November 9, 2008
By Aldo Penafiel, Annandale, VA

surrounded by missile and smoke.
when “hit the floor” and “keep running” are the only things spoke.
where killing is every day.
thanking the Lord that you ain’t died today.
and dying tomorrow’s a great possibility.
and all the soldiers under my responsibility.
we live and we die together. our policy.
and I would never take anyone off of me.
they fight and they cry for me.
they die for me. it’s a war that’s just how it’s got to be.
but we save a seat, when it’s time for me
and my end to meet.
there’s a time when it’s gotta come.
so save me some, until then it was nice
now I gotta run.
enemy is close behind, and my behind
isn’t safe until i cross that boundary line.

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Free- GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 7:38 pm
Free- GOLD, Blllll, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I believe in you and I believe in me, and I believe that we are not meaningless."
"What a waste of a perfectly good wrist."

sounds like a poetic rap....profound

on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:28 am
deleteddeletedFoff, Columbus, Ohio
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bravo. definatley worth reading.

on Mar. 28 2011 at 1:40 pm
gabzter12 BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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this was writtne very well! it gave me chills!
very very well done

on Oct. 25 2010 at 9:12 pm
WordforWord SILVER, Royal Oak, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Don't Just Exist, Live

For some reason this was played with music in my head... you should make it into a song or rap, yes i know, stupid. Picture m&m or someone singin it in your head lol

Phoenixx GOLD said...
on Sep. 11 2010 at 10:36 pm
Phoenixx GOLD, Toronto, Other
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nice ending :)

on Aug. 15 2009 at 6:09 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Amazing! It has a nice flow. Almost sounds like you were rapping. I loved it. Great job!! ~~~IF you have time, please check out my work. Comment and rate if you wish. Thanks!

on Aug. 12 2009 at 2:39 am
Angilene BRONZE, Clayton, Washington
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Wow this was vary well written. Keep up the good work =]

on Aug. 11 2009 at 4:04 pm
lemons_r_crazy BRONZE, Holdenville, Oklahoma
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That was really good I really liked that!

on Aug. 11 2009 at 5:37 am
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
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Wow...its deep

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