February 18, 2014
Smoothly sailing
Cross the ocean blue
Serenely gliding
Cross the raging seas

Tossed to and throe
But stands 'gainst the waves
Fighting to say afloat

The wind throws it about
Yet pushes it forward
as the waves pull it back

Beautiful is the monster tamer
The monster roars
the monster fights
And yet the tamer cracks the whip

Monster scared into submission
Yet on the inside
the storm rages on

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Harri said...
Mar. 8, 2014 at 3:40 pm
Not bad, Rose! Though maybe next time try to use more than one word in your description. You use Monster a couple of times. Other wise, I love it!
ImmortalRose replied...
Nov. 11, 2014 at 1:51 pm
Thanks. Yea...
jennag4 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 7, 2014 at 9:22 pm
really good! could be a little clearer but really crreative
ImmortalRose replied...
Nov. 11, 2014 at 1:51 pm
yea... it was a bit random
Rosalynne said...
Feb. 25, 2014 at 2:55 pm
Wow... this was never my favorite poem... But 2/5 stars is sad... Maybe I should delete it...
AzureBlue replied...
Mar. 1, 2014 at 1:18 pm
No, it's beautiful, the problem is that it seems to lack creativity, not much seems to happen in the 5 stanzas.. and at some points it's confusing; overall it's a fine piece! :)
Rosalynne replied...
Mar. 1, 2014 at 7:00 pm
Okay... its cuz I was trying to make it more positive lol
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