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Crumbs

January 21, 2014
By dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"


We write about our feelings
for the same reasons we
complain about crumbs;
because we’re not always
sure how they got there,
and it’s hard as hell
trying to get rid of
them.



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dinks PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 22 2014 at 6:09 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thanks so much!

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 21 2014 at 8:04 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Gah, this is so true! I love the concept of this poem; it's short but speaks volumes. I personally don't think it needs more rhythm. Free verse isn't about that, it's about getting your point across in the best way possible, and in the way you think suits it best. And I think you did exactly that. Awesome job! :)

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 3 2014 at 10:28 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thank you!!

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 3 2014 at 10:28 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Great point, thank you!

on Feb. 3 2014 at 7:22 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Yeah, I do agree with the previous commenter about the rhythm of this poem but it was a great poem! I loved how quick and how the end was sneaking up on you the moment that you started to read the first word. Great job!

on Feb. 2 2014 at 7:07 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 167 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

I feel like this could use some more rhythm, however I am no expert at free verse! I do like what this is talkign about. It made me go, "man, that's all to true!!"


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