The Tear Cycle

January 10, 2014
By SabbyCat BRONZE, Stroud, Other
SabbyCat BRONZE, Stroud, Other
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Fear is a sin. Almost all the evil in the world originated because someone is afraid of something." - Lucy Maud Montgomery, "The Blue Castle"


Hot tears that spring, in a rush, from behind her eyes
Boiling waterfalls careening down the smooth cheek
Stinging their way down the very path of a life
A palace wherein hurting has not been roped, and dwells unhindered.

Crystalline walls are bitter to the hand of the flow-
A voice that beauty still grasps flings itself in the way sometimes
But it loses its own self in the sound of the sobbing
Which is raw, and snags itself upon the diamonds.

In the evening, when things are quieter
And hope is asking if the roar of fire has died away
The hard and chocking sound of your earlier tears
Has once again been burned, in the heat of Today.


The author's comments:
Just a little poem I wrote a few days ago. I'm pretty new to free verse, and this is my first post here as I've just signed up. I'd love to hear any thoughts or criticisms!
Oh, and by the way, I'm not depressed like in the poem. I'm just empathetic. ;P

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on Mar. 2 2014 at 8:26 am
SabbyCat BRONZE, Stroud, Other
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Fear is a sin. Almost all the evil in the world originated because someone is afraid of something." - Lucy Maud Montgomery, "The Blue Castle"

Thank you very much! That's really kind of you and I appreciate it. 

on Feb. 10 2014 at 8:33 pm
Ultimatebookworm BRONZE, Oceanside, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Live long, and prosper."-Spock :)
"I am no bird; and no net ensnares me; I am a free human being with an independent will."-Charlotte Bronte
"A ruffled mind makes a restless pillow."-Charlotte Bronte
"Men judge us by the success of our efforts. God looks at the efforts themselves."
-Charlotte Bronte

"The cleverest of all, in my opinion, is the man who calls himself a fool at least once a month."
-Fyodor Dostoevsky

"It takes people a long time to learn the difference between talent and genius, especially ambitious young men and women."
-Louisa May Alcott

I really love this poem. The visions you create throughout the poem open the imagination and really heighten one's empathy.


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