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December 13, 2013
By BandGeekAndProud PLATINUM, Burlington, Massachusetts
BandGeekAndProud PLATINUM, Burlington, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagination is more important than knowledge."
Albert Einstein

she sits and smiles
and smiles and sits and
nods her head and
tries to ignore the blood
leaking from her
drops of red rain.

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lexiibeale said...
on Jan. 12 2014 at 10:57 pm
lexiibeale, Germantown, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Colour my life with the chaos of trouble"

I LOVE the flow of this poem. Very nicely done!

on Jan. 7 2014 at 1:28 pm
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."

My biggest critic would be to get rid of the unnecessary words. If you are going for a short and sweet poem then cut out any word that isn't necessary. Once you do that I would rearrange the lines.  For example: She sits
nods her head 
her fingertips 
drops of red
rain Just a visual of what I was thinking. 
I really like the simplicity of this poem and it took me a few times, but I think I get what you were trying to say. 

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