Nothing Like MAG

October 27, 2008
By Griffin D., Los Angeles, CA, Los Angeles, CA

Nothing takes the blue out of the sky
or the shine out of the sun
or the caress out of the breeze
like good old-fashioned

unrequited love.


The author's comments:
Because teenage love is the kind that hurts the most …

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on Nov. 2 2012 at 1:40 pm
ChobaniLuvinPenguin PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"What makes the desert beautiful is that somewhere it hides a well."
― Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, The Little Prince

Cute!!! Well phrased, really! It's simple, but very powerful! It sounds almost like a quote that belongs on some kind of poster to be hung in peoples' rooms! I'd like to see anyone who has negative feedback for this try to write a poem on the subject. It certainly isn't easy!

on Oct. 29 2012 at 1:53 pm
LestyPatrick PLATINUM, Darlington, South Carolina
43 articles 5 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Failure is, in a sense, the highway to success, in as much as every discovery of what is false leads us to seek earnestly after what is true, and very fresh experience points out some form of error which we shall afterward carefully avoid"John Keats

Love this. It's so true. Here is one of my teen love pangs in short XD TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/498728/Even-Now/ would love feedback other stuff as well!

on Oct. 11 2012 at 7:21 pm
lizzyw77 BRONZE, Wayland, Massachusetts
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I agree. Got right to te point.. I love the phrase "old-fashioned." It made me smile

Niti-M BRONZE said...
on Jul. 15 2012 at 1:20 am
Niti-M BRONZE, Mumbai (Matunga), Other
2 articles 1 photo 23 comments

Don't I just love it? Its beautiful. I love the way you think, yes, nothing can really take the blue out of the sky forever!

Keep writing :) And check out my work please, your feedback will be much appreciated.

 

TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/478991/Tryst-with-Destiny/ Its about how God's design of our life is in circles. Pretty intriguing. Please :) Thank you!

 


on May. 10 2012 at 10:08 pm
DaleTheWhale BRONZE, Tipp City, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You weren't put on this earth to be ordinary."

Short and to the point. Original. Well done.

on Apr. 18 2012 at 8:10 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

Yeah, it hurts...

niner PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2012 at 4:26 pm
niner PLATINUM, Hartville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Isn't it funny how you broke my heart, but I still love you with all the pieces?"
"It's easy to stand in a crowd, but it takes courage to stand alone"
"What would you attempt if you knew you could never fail?"

this was very good! right to the point, but not. hard to explain, but good!

 


on Apr. 18 2012 at 1:26 pm
grace sewright, Carefree, Arizona
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I really enjoyed reading this, it describes the emotions of unrequited love perfectly. Reading this poem takes me back to memories of the same feeling. I loved it!

on Mar. 27 2012 at 6:36 pm
JadedHeart GOLD, Somewhere, Georgia
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I love the poem and I think anyone who can't see the pure beauty of this poem, should not be on this website. It's simply wonderful and deep. Very deep, and reminds me of only three months ago. Please keep writing. 

on Mar. 27 2012 at 2:57 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."
-J.K.Rowling

This is simple but is deep!! Love it

on Mar. 27 2012 at 2:33 pm
rescuetruck607 GOLD, Bellmore, New York
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i really liked it

on Mar. 5 2012 at 1:11 pm
this reminds me of my crush!!!

on Mar. 1 2012 at 2:46 pm
Seelix PLATINUM, Chandler, Arizona
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Sorry this was supposed to be a comment directed at Poopstain23.

on Mar. 1 2012 at 2:42 pm
Seelix PLATINUM, Chandler, Arizona
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Alright, so in your opinion what makes this a bad poem? Using circular reasoning (aka- it is bad, because it is bad) is very remedial. If you don't like it then have reasons to back it up. Sure it was a bit cliche, but it was fun to read and fairly well written.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 6:52 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Wonderful imagery~ and yes, young love does hurt the most.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 4:57 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

Your comments a little over dramatic.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 4:54 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
12 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

This is really great, but I was NOT expecting that last line. wow. haha

on Dec. 8 2011 at 12:27 pm
Countrylife4 GOLD, Maine
11 articles 4 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Someday soon we're gonna catch that dream we've been chasing"
"Seven days without a horse makes one weak."
"The worst part of riding is when you dismount."

Insult my clothes, I say, “Okay, thanks for the compliment.”
Insult the way I look, I say, “Thanks for notifying me.”
Mock me and say riding isn’t a sport, and I’ll say,”You say that ’cause you can’t ride.” But before you make fun of my horse, make sure you have “911″ on your speed dial.

This was wonderful!

Poopstain23 said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 12:21 pm
This was absolutley horrendus. I could poop better poems then this. Whoever said this was good needs to go back to 1st grade and learn what good poetry is. Dispciable!!!!!!!

on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:03 am
AmandaaPandaa GOLD, Glen Cove, New York
15 articles 9 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"what lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies within us"!!

beautiful!!!! i lovee it so simple but so true and unique!


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