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Disputationi Mortem

December 23, 2013
By JackShadow22 SILVER, Henderson, Nevada
JackShadow22 SILVER, Henderson, Nevada
9 articles 7 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be drunk, Miss, but in the morning I will be sober and you will still be ugly."
-Winston Churchill


It hasn't been long now,
or could it?
A day, maybe a year;
Time doesn't exist with her.
I'm glad it doesn't,
I prefer to be here forever,
In her embrace,
In her heart,
In the words she speaks.
My heart beats solely for her;
It chooses no one else.
The pull of her presence,
And the sound of her voice,
The daze in her eyes,
And the feel of her lips.
To live without her, I cannot think it possible.
To live without her, I mustn't think it possible.
If I were to die, would she be there to hold me?
Would she hold my Heart like always,
or would she mend it,
make it whole,
and end my serenity with pain.
Does she knows it is hers?
It is a gift I hope is not exchanged,
I cannot think she would,
I mustn't think she would.
How far we've come.
It hasn't been far,
Time doesn't exist.
She doesn't exist,
Does that mean neither should I?
But if she were to exist,
would she love me as I would,
and hold me as I've never been?
Only time will tell,
Only, time will lie.


The author's comments:
I'm not sure what this is, or where it came from but you know, here you go....

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MishMosh said...
on Dec. 31 2013 at 5:50 pm
MishMosh, Hawkes Bay, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood and I, took the one less traveled by and that has made all the difference" - Robert Frost, Road Not Taken

I like it, it's very moving. There is only one thing I would change. "the time doesn't exist" and "she doesn't exist" around. I think this because it would sound like the the person means more to you than time does. But I might be completely wrong, you might be implying this written work in a totally different perspective. I love what you did here and keep up the good work. Cheers.  

Jonah_xD said...
on Dec. 31 2013 at 3:37 pm
Jonah_xD, Crisfield, Maryland
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Hey great job on this! I can really read the emotion in each othe lines. Some of the lines get a little repetitive or redundant, but I really like the overall effect. Well done; keep up the good work!

on Dec. 30 2013 at 12:27 pm
JackShadow22 SILVER, Henderson, Nevada
9 articles 7 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be drunk, Miss, but in the morning I will be sober and you will still be ugly."
-Winston Churchill

Thank you, I do apprecitate it. The Title is Latin for Timeless Death.

on Dec. 28 2013 at 1:12 am
NaaThompson GOLD, Allston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you don't like someone's story, write your own. -Chinua Achebe

  What's the meaning of the title.  

on Dec. 28 2013 at 1:10 am
NaaThompson GOLD, Allston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you don't like someone's story, write your own. -Chinua Achebe

  This is awesome. You use a lot of description which is really good. Am giving it 5 stars because I love it. Excellent work!!!  


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