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Little Secrets

November 14, 2013
By dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"


It was because
our veins were filled
with a little more than
blood,
It was because
our heads were spinning
a little more than
usual,
It was because
our bodies felt warmer
laying on the freezing grass than
they did in front of a
fire,
It was because
you had waited so long
to tell me something
I had waited so long
to hear,
It was because
you left me with
a little more than
just words on my lips,
It was because of all this
that I am sitting here
and trying to piece together
a memory that I can’t
remember half of,
but can’t seem to forget
either.



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on Jan. 5 2014 at 8:46 pm
Shahrier PLATINUM, Colma, California
28 articles 10 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm a river that no longer flows" - a friend
"when the people lead, leaders follow" - Gandhi

i love the way the poem flows and as i read i had goosebumps. one thing i would like to critisize is the ending. namingly the last two lines. it just seems a little awkward. like you added a word too many. other than that, love the poem. 

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 5 2014 at 8:38 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thank you!

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 5 2014 at 8:38 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thank you!

Alycia. BRONZE said...
on Jan. 3 2014 at 12:09 pm
Alycia. BRONZE, Lower Gwynedd, Pennsylvania
4 articles 8 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Our lives are not our own. We are bound to others, past and present, and by each crime and every kindness, we birth our future.” -- David Mitchell, Cloud Atlas

Such a wonderful poem! I love the entire mood! Great job!

on Nov. 22 2013 at 4:11 pm
No-one-knows-me.. PLATINUM, Rockford, Michigan
27 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be or not to be That is the question.
-Shakespeare

keep up the good work.

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 21 2013 at 7:52 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thank you 

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 21 2013 at 7:52 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thank you!

on Nov. 21 2013 at 4:21 pm
Poetic_Person GOLD, Shippensburg, Pennsylvania
18 articles 8 photos 40 comments
Such a great poem..... Really, it's awesome :) great job

on Nov. 21 2013 at 6:42 am
Jadesnewgroove PLATINUM, Dry Ridge, Kentucky
23 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
She may have been there for you in the aftermath, but I was there for you when it all came crashing down.-Megan Duke

Your work is so great, you're a great author!


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