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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Shmelmo said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 9:40 pm
This is a really cool poem! I love it! Great metaphor!
 
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Soniaa said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 8:46 pm
Wow...I Love it! Great job. :D
 
Dodson said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 5:09 pm
wow thats really good. great job i like the message
 
Caitlin14 said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 1:34 pm
I love this pice you did a really good job! so beautiful
 
Paul T. said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 1:14 pm
I love bubbles. I also like people. This is very fun and cool metaphor, I also really like how you showed the reader gently gently drifting down. A very good poem, nice work
 
Softball_volleyball01 said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 12:04 pm
This is honestly a great metaphor..so deep! Love it!!
 
Katelyn V. said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 10:35 am
I really like your poem. I like bubbles:) great metaphor.
 
Dillinger123 said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 10:24 am
Lovely poem. I especially liked how the text appeared as though it were a bubble floating down the page.
 
jacob26950 said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 8:35 am
i like how the format of it made it seem like it was actualy a bubble drifting across the page. great poem. it reminded me of my childhood playing with bubbles for hours upon hours
 
Loriel J. said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 8:34 am
very cute poem!(:  i loved the meaning and how you came up with it was really cool:)
 
IRUEHL said...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 3:38 pm
Beautiful! i really liked it!
 
Echinacea1 said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 2:30 pm

I immediately loved the way you kept the style simplistic in the intro, it fit perfectly with the theme. But my favorite part was the end starting with "it’s the little ones/that leave quietly" for some reason this part was very poignant. I also thought how you made a break in the flow of the poem for he last stanzas ("everyone...all evaporated") was a wonderful idea, especially as I always have trouble with doing that myself.

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Govna'12 said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 10:25 am

Amazing, Metaphor(:

i loved it! so beautiful(:

love, Govna'

 
NoLabelsPlease said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 5:39 pm
This was such a great metaphor to use. I would have never thought of something so creative. It fits perfectly with the point you're trying to get across. Amazing! Loved it!
 
SweetbeanieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 3:23 pm
Truly brilliant!  LOVE THIS! :P
 
to.hold.the.sun This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 10:41 am
This is amazing. Seriously. It gave me goosebumps. What a great metaphor!
 
Meg15 said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:22 am
I think it sounds pretty good:)
 
jhbdfksd said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:16 am
heeeeeeeeeey love it lols <3
 
dfdgdfsg replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:17 am
omgeeee ! my tooo lollss . wuddupp !?
 
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