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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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NoLabelsPlease said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 5:39 pm:
This was such a great metaphor to use. I would have never thought of something so creative. It fits perfectly with the point you're trying to get across. Amazing! Loved it!
 
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Sweetbeanie said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 3:23 pm:
Truly brilliant!  LOVE THIS! :P
 
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to.hold.the.sun This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 10:41 am:
This is amazing. Seriously. It gave me goosebumps. What a great metaphor!
 
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Meg15 said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:22 am:
I think it sounds pretty good:)
 
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jhbdfksd said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:16 am:
heeeeeeeeeey love it lols <3
 
dfdgdfsg replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:17 am :
omgeeee ! my tooo lollss . wuddupp !?
 
dsgdfgsdfg replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:18 am :
heeeeeeeeey
 
hbhfgcvjghhfgh replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:20 am :
This is not a place for play .. !! GET OFF!. :)
 
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ImBetterThanYou said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 9:02 am:
I like this peom
 
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Captain_Awesome said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 9:22 pm:
I really like it but the only thing is that I am absolutely we are more important to GOD than bubbles popping. I understand its a metaphor and great poem! :D But maybe when we evaporate theres another place we go...
 
Mari replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 10:12 am :
Oh shut up & just enjoy the poem!
 
Mc'Blacky replied...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 11:58 am :

You are right :)

We are more important that a bubble

 
KyleG This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 21, 2011 at 12:33 am :
How do you know we're more important than a bubble? 
 
Mc'Blacky replied...
May 21, 2011 at 2:46 pm :
Just look around you and you'll see that we are more imporant than just a bubble.
 
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Dally said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 5:11 pm:
Really good Metaphor...
 
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britty said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 1:02 pm:

this is prettygood :)

 

 
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heyshay said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 12:26 pm:
I chose this poem, because my dad calls me bubbles.  I thought this was a really good poem because its showing how everyone leaves a mark, and the bubbles do that same.  Also, how you're describing of the popping of the bubbles and how you are in a way comparing losing the bubbles and closely losing people and how they can blow or pop or how people can blow or snap quickly.  You did a really good job on writing this poem. It was really good the way you broke up the lines with how ... (more »)
 
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Angel_17 said...
Feb. 21, 2011 at 11:57 pm:
I loved how you used God with the bubbles to make a point:) 
 
Dally replied...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 5:13 pm :
I agree!! =]
 
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Alia_TanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 10:30 pm:
Brilliant Poem! Great Job =D I loved how you connected bubbles to life!! Please see my poem called i know i wont Thank you so much and again great job!!! :D :D :D
 
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