Another Metaphor of Life MAG

October 14, 2008
By Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.


The author's comments:
I happened to be blowing bubbles in my room when my thoughts suddenly took a semi-philosophical turn and came up with this metaphor. I liked the idea immediately, if only because it was both lighthearted and yet potentially cynical (in pointing out that a person's life, no matter how long his/her "imprint" lasts, will fade away eventually).

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on Feb. 9 2012 at 11:22 pm
mammothfrk PLATINUM, Mammoth Lakes, California
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Favorite Quote:
This is your life, are you who you want to be?

really good!

on Feb. 9 2012 at 9:05 pm
Bookworm1997 BRONZE, South Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
You cannot open a book without learning something. -Confucious

Nice poem, although it does sound a bit cynical.

on Feb. 9 2012 at 8:37 pm
Amyelisee BRONZE, Lake Bluff, Illinois
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I like it!!!

on Feb. 9 2012 at 6:20 pm
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"It's a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where."
-James Clavell, "Shogun"

Excellent! I love it! Would you mind reading my poem, "Revelation of Infinity"? Thanks.

on Feb. 9 2012 at 1:30 pm
MarissaWhitecloud SILVER, Oskaloosa, Iowa
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Love it, great way using Metaphors!

Shacey BRONZE said...
on Feb. 9 2012 at 7:13 am
Shacey BRONZE, Watervliet, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"No one can make you feel inferior without your consent"- Eleanor Roosevelt

Wow. I really enjoyed your poem. I hope you continue to write! You are awesome! Please take the time to read and comment on some of my writing.

on Feb. 9 2012 at 12:18 am
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

I love how light-hearted and totally true your poem is. I would honored if you would read one of my poems.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:23 am
Andres60 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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I love the way you made it so some made marks but we all get forgotten sooner or later; Good job!

on Jan. 18 2012 at 6:16 pm
StarryRoss GOLD, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"Writing is the socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." -E.L. Doctorow

Ha i really don't think it needed any more 'feeling behind the words.' The way it almost feels detached enhances it, i think it would sound like they're trying way too hard if they went back to add 'feeling.' Not all poems need it, that's what makes some great.

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 8:17 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
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This is a great poem. The metaphor makes it simple to understand but it has a nice meaning. Would you mind reading my poem A Pink Watch, Portal, and Perpetual Sea if you get a chance? Thank you!

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Dec. 27 2011 at 10:31 pm
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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This is wonderful! I love the metaphor.... you are totally right; it is sweet and lighthearted, but its also cynical, almost serious. Keep writing! Thank you :)

on Dec. 27 2011 at 7:53 pm
angelchild GOLD, Stockton, California
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Favorite Quote:
Once you learn to read, you will be forever free.
- Frederick Douglass,

A library is infinity under a roof.
- Gail Carson Levine
O, there is lovely to feel a book, a good book, firm in the hand, for its fatness holds rich promise, and you are hot inside to think of good hours to come.


- Richard Llewellyn

Awesome! please check outr my work too!!

vazenitran98 said...
on Dec. 27 2011 at 9:15 am
vazenitran98, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I had the blues because I had no shoes until upon the street,I met a man who had no feet."

I like how the imagination works in everyone. I truly loved this poem and it's making me think twice about life. Good Job!

on Dec. 5 2011 at 8:59 pm
EternallyMe03 SILVER, BIRMINGHAM, Alabama
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The meaning behind this holds a lot of truth, and I often love to write with this same idea in mind.  Even though you might try your best and be the best person you can be, sometimes with the life given to you, all you can do is fall.  We often think about the "popping" part, but we don't always think about the "evaporating" part.

niner PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 5 2011 at 6:32 pm
niner PLATINUM, Hartville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Isn't it funny how you broke my heart, but I still love you with all the pieces?"
"It's easy to stand in a crowd, but it takes courage to stand alone"
"What would you attempt if you knew you could never fail?"

nice anaolgy. :) very thoughtful.

on Dec. 5 2011 at 6:32 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

I liked the speed and how smooth it was to read, but I don't feel like there was enough feeling behind the words.

Big k said...
on Dec. 5 2011 at 2:51 pm
good job but you forgot the part were he stabs all the others whith the wand

on Dec. 5 2011 at 7:53 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

nice work adams! 
Think you could check out my work sometime? Would really appreciate your feedback :)

on Dec. 5 2011 at 7:04 am
Refugemywords BRONZE, Chengdu, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"It is very good advice to believe only what an artist does, rather then what he says about his work."~David Hockney

Pretty good origin for the poem. The pace and tempo is great. I love the idea, bubbles...

BadGirl GOLD said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 8:26 pm
BadGirl GOLD, Dacula, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be HATED for who I am
then be LOVED for who I'm not.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
All I need is for someone to say "I believe in you."

I loved it! I liked how you got the idea :)

I'm new here, but when I get stuff posted could you check it out?



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