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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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Fia-fia said...
Dec. 27, 2011 at 10:31 pm:
This is wonderful! I love the metaphor.... you are totally right; it is sweet and lighthearted, but its also cynical, almost serious. Keep writing! Thank you :)
 
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angelchild said...
Dec. 27, 2011 at 7:53 pm:
Awesome! please check outr my work too!!
 
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vazenitran98 said...
Dec. 27, 2011 at 9:15 am:
I like how the imagination works in everyone. I truly loved this poem and it's making me think twice about life. Good Job!
 
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EternallyMe03 said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 8:59 pm:
The meaning behind this holds a lot of truth, and I often love to write with this same idea in mind.  Even though you might try your best and be the best person you can be, sometimes with the life given to you, all you can do is fall.  We often think about the "popping" part, but we don't always think about the "evaporating" part.
 
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belieber said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 6:32 pm:
nice anaolgy. :) very thoughtful.
 
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FrAme said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 6:32 pm:
I liked the speed and how smooth it was to read, but I don't feel like there was enough feeling behind the words.
 
StarryRoss replied...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 6:16 pm :
Ha i really don't think it needed any more 'feeling behind the words.' The way it almost feels detached enhances it, i think it would sound like they're trying way too hard if they went back to add 'feeling.' Not all poems need it, that's what makes some great.
 
vivig4ever replied...
Jun. 20, 2012 at 6:17 pm :
i agree. i think it's better if none of them had an author's explanation. that's the point of petry; for every person to find their own meaning in a small group of creative, unexplainable words.
 
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Big k said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 2:51 pm:
good job but you forgot the part were he stabs all the others whith the wand
 
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youngspeare said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 7:53 am:
nice work adams! 
Think you could check out my work sometime? Would really appreciate your feedback :)
 
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Refugemywords said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 7:04 am:
Pretty good origin for the poem. The pace and tempo is great. I love the idea, bubbles...
 
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BadGirl said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 8:26 pm:

I loved it! I liked how you got the idea :)

I'm new here, but when I get stuff posted could you check it out?

 
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ifonly303 said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 7:33 pm:
I really liked this your writting gets so deep... Please Continue
 
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GirlWhoWrote said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:41 pm:
i love this metaphor! People PLEASE check out my work!!!!
 
cgwriter replied...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 7:04 pm :
I like it too
 
Beth328 replied...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 7:24 pm :
Very good metaphor. And i love bubbles
 
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ashleyn said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:38 pm:
I love this metaphor! Crazy what some imagination (and bubbles) can create. Wonderful work of art <3
 
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Dreammer said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:06 pm:
I apsolutly love this poem people feel free to llook at and comment on my work
 
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JuneTaz said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 12:20 pm:
Love the metaphor!! It really does describe life. Keep up the philosophical thinking! ;)
 
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GirlWhoWrote said...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 8:33 pm:
This is awesome! Check out my work plleeeeassse!!!!!!
 
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