Another Metaphor of Life MAG

October 14, 2008
By Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.


The author's comments:
I happened to be blowing bubbles in my room when my thoughts suddenly took a semi-philosophical turn and came up with this metaphor. I liked the idea immediately, if only because it was both lighthearted and yet potentially cynical (in pointing out that a person's life, no matter how long his/her "imprint" lasts, will fade away eventually).

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on Jun. 3 2010 at 6:56 pm
livelovelaugh353 SILVER, San Carlos, California
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wow this is amazing, i love the metaphor and ive never thought about life this way at all, great job!! Keep writing! :)

on Jun. 3 2010 at 6:34 pm
the_quiet_one BRONZE, Orangevale, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I write for no other purpose than to add to the beauty that now belongs to me. I write a story for no other reason than to add three or four hundred acres to my magnificent estate.”
~Jack London (White Fang)

I agree! The metaphor is great! 

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on Jun. 3 2010 at 6:10 pm
darkvisions, White Plains, New York
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Truly awesome. I absolutely love it.

on Jun. 3 2010 at 4:15 pm
LaughingGirl GOLD, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Play the music not the instrument. -Author Unknown

Very original. I like it!

on Jun. 3 2010 at 3:56 pm
HeraclitusDRM SILVER, Sewell, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"For a man to conquer himself is the first and noblest of all victories." -Plato

Definitely very original

on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:46 pm
roxymutt BRONZE, Marietta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see. -David Henry Thoreau

This is so original! I absolutely loved the metaphor to this poem! You write quite well..although it's almost a sad type of metaphor! Keep it up!! I would love if you might check out my piece!

on Jun. 1 2010 at 6:15 pm
Kerstin White BRONZE, Williamsfield, Ohio
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Oh! I really really like this

 

 

 

 

 

 


on May. 24 2010 at 8:46 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I completely agree! Very Well-written. Keep it up!

on May. 12 2010 at 8:40 pm
clauds1215 BRONZE, New York, New York
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This is a really interesting metaphor. I really like the idea of bubbles - it's gentle and fragile and beautiful but there is still something a bit eerie about them. Loved the poem!

on May. 12 2010 at 7:13 pm
thepaperinventory PLATINUM, Saratoga, California
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Wow, that's awesome!!! I love this poem! You're a great writer!

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 12 2010 at 6:19 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

This is amazing, i loved it so much. You took something like blowing bubbles and turned into something so amazing profound. You're such an amazing writer and I love the title, it really grabbed my attention and also that fact that you're on the homepage of the website. Congrats on that by the way. Well my comment sorta turned into a long paragraph about randomness. But keep up the great work and I look forward to reading many more of your peices.

P.S. If it's not too much to ask could you please check out some of my work i'd love your feedback. Thanks :)


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on May. 12 2010 at 11:11 am
kaates GOLD, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
"It's pathetic how we can't live with the things we can't understand. How we need everything labeled and explained and deconstructed."

“Give me rampant intellectualism as a coping mechanism.”

“I just don't want to die without a few scars.”

This is more realistic than cynical in my opinion. However, the ending was a tad cynical. But it's different for everyone how we look at life and how we leave things after we die. Well done

on May. 12 2010 at 10:36 am
Priskilla PLATINUM, Ruskin, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"LIVE FAST DIE YOUNG"

I enjoy how you took somthing as simple as blowing bubble into somthing so deep :)

on May. 12 2010 at 9:39 am
Acalleq PLATINUM, Togiak, Alaska
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you never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

very interesting point of view. reminds me of what my parents say all the time about how short life is and i'm just a speck in the universe, or something serious like that. anyways i thought this was wonderful. thumbs up!

rayj095 GOLD said...
on Apr. 20 2010 at 11:01 pm
rayj095 GOLD, Gadsden, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"And if we're lucky, we realize, in the face of everything, in the face of life, the true dream is being able
to dream at all." -Grey's Anatomy

Beautiful poem, great metaphor. Love how you took a simple subject and made it great.

on Apr. 20 2010 at 9:29 pm
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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i think that this ia amazing it gives me something to think about next time i have bubbles hehe ,,, i loved it i really did.

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on Apr. 20 2010 at 4:54 pm
i love the way you put this! great job :)

on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:08 am
nvrxexistedx2xu GOLD, Chestertown, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
“love will always be in me for you even when i want to give up” – S.E.B

I really like this!! I love the meaning behind it! Great Job!

on Mar. 29 2010 at 8:32 pm
This a very interesting way of looking at life. Very eye-opening. Lovely poem.

on Mar. 29 2010 at 7:22 pm
thoughtfulsoul PLATINUM, El Cajon, California
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lovely metaphor. I absolutely love this poem. The syntax matches the content perfectly. This poem is beautiful


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