Does it bother you that you're not real?

October 3, 2013
By Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen


It's raining again

I watch a tiny spider
With only seven legs
Drag his lopsided body
Across the slick concrete

I remember pulling the legs off spiders just like this one
When I was a little kid

He struggles to breach
A crack in the sidewalk
Eventually he falls in
His remaining legs flail
For a few long seconds

I remember feeling no remorse then

It's still raining



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Beef. PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 13 2013 at 11:03 pm
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
29 articles 0 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen

Your comments are a bright spot in my day. I don't know about the titile either. I just felt my fingers tapping over the keys and there it was, something strange dredged up from my subconcious. I'm sure there's some connection, but I'm not privy to it.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 9 2013 at 7:07 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

The twisted brutality of the poem is incredible. Confession: when I was kid, I would somewhat enjoy doing the same action to insects and other bugs what you described in this poem. The imagery is visual and relatable. I'm not sure about the title though...what does it mean? And the repitition of the first line at the end adds to the emotion of the poem. Ironic enough: it's raining here. Great poem, Beef. 


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