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It kills to be loved

September 30, 2013
By madison-ave BRONZE, Atlantic City, New Jersey
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madison-ave BRONZE, Atlantic City, New Jersey
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A virus
in search of a host
a cell to attach to
to infect
if only to be
noticed

It means
no harm
it
pines for
attention
for acknowledgment

It kills
but not
to kill
it kills
to be
loved

© Karen S., Norwalk, CT

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east_of_ada said...
on Oct. 17 2013 at 10:41 pm
east_of_ada, Null, Other
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"As for me, I am a watercolor. I wash off." (via Anne Sexton,"For My Lover, Returning To His Wife")

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okay, first off, lovely concept. i do really like the ideal of social acknowledgement being a virus that literally contaminates you~it's good. however, me personally, i dislike the shortened lines of the second stanzas; it feels out of place in considerates with one and three.  as a whole, the stanza lines to me seem a bit uneven and jagged, but that's a personal thing. in terms of content, i'm not going to recommend metaphorical/literal or whatever, as you need to to figure out what sort of style you want, not what i'm here to tell you~. in truths, all i believe you need is more depth, otherwise, this poem would be a lovely piece of word.
Kindle GOLD said...
on Oct. 17 2013 at 10:32 pm
Kindle GOLD, Sudbury, Other
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This is really interesting as far as biology poems go, although the aesthetic aspect is slightly lacking.
madison-ave BRONZE said...
on Oct. 17 2013 at 10:30 pm
madison-ave BRONZE, Atlantic City, New Jersey
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thank you , i kind of had a feeling it was quite underdeveloped. i'll work on revising/adding to it. thanks much xx 
Shade3043 DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 14 2013 at 2:15 am
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Oh, and it seems like you're just making new lines randomly, you should also consider making lines that actually make sense when you make a new line
Shade3043 DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 14 2013 at 2:14 am
Shade3043 DIAMOND, Shade3043 Did This, In Case Of Anonymous, Other
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Doesn't really make an impact on me, and leaves no room for interpretation based on the title. Pretty short, no spectacular imagery. Try to add length, imagery, and a sense of interpretation in your future articles. Keep at it. I know that you could be an extremely talented writer, but for now this isn't that good of a poem for me. Needs work. 2/5