Outside and Looking In

September 6, 2013
By TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.

You are only as strong as your weakest link.


Because
Anyone
Can see that this is
Killing me:

Time and time again I
Open my arms wide, but

Since they don’t
Care about me at all, they
Hide in their
Own little circle in
Order to
Laugh at the girl they left behind.


The author's comments:
This is what I have to look forward to when school starts. Cheers!

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on Apr. 5 2015 at 4:07 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

HEYYYY I AM JUST POSTING THIS HERE because I know I've been gone. Just plain gone for ages now and I just, I MISS YOU. SO MUCH. It is like I had this amazing friend in you and all of you people and I haven't been able to reach out and it sucks and I just had to come back at least once and say this, that I miss you and I hope that you still remember me. Before I go and leave TeenInk. And well, here's an address: dua.jas (attherateof) hotmail

Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 9 2014 at 5:20 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I just want to hug you after reading this poem. I think everyone has felt this way, one way or another. I like the emotions, how you speak to your audience without becoming melodramatic, and the lonesome image in the end. 

on Sep. 20 2013 at 10:47 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

This poem is such a vivid and candid description. And the simplicty of it is just breath-taking. Though one thing I can't figure out is why you used the colon after the "killing me"  other than that, I think it's really good. And well, I'd like to say if this real is from your very own perspective that you're better off away from them and believe me you'll find REAL people out there You will. And then you'll just be glad that you waited for them to come around and they'll come around unexpectedly so don't go looking for them. 
Love always.




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