Victims of Mechanics

September 9, 2013
By SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel


Physics

The physics of motion
and rest implies
that sudden coming to rest
of a vehicle
results in the lunging forward of
whoever’s inside.
Yet, for them so it seems
that for a while time halted

Action

Utter Carelessness results in
Catastrophe.

Reaction

Sense of hearing impaired
temporarily.
Like after a missile finds its target
all one hear is that on-going, never-ceasing
“teeee”
Sight intact, yet doubtfulness
engulfs.
This is all too much to take in.
A girl: weeping. Tears: flying.
Her cries are unheard.
Then what alarms most
Blood.
Everywhere, in the nothingness.
Thinking bleary and thoughts distorted.
What did we do to deserve this?
A group of children
Impeccant
On our way to school
Unseen arms help me away
I close the lids, block out
Everything.

Spectator


Destruction
Tragedy
though not my own
Compels me to wonder
what if
I had been subject to that
Physics


The author's comments:
A fierce accident that moved me. I was the spectator. This is my first poem of it's kind. Not free verse I mean but just so. Do tell me if it turned out to be a disaster. :P Hope you enjoy reading.

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on Nov. 18 2013 at 5:55 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Me too! I am trying to get back into it as well. And Thanks so much. Oh, I hope I can read more from you soon. I just love reading your stuff so I guess I'll just go and read the old articles. Love, Saphira.

on Nov. 18 2013 at 5:51 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Oh Lexy, You really do praise overmuch. You are too kind and you just made my day again. thank you ever so much for your kind words. And yes, I guess I've had that feeling a lot of times but could only put it into words this once. And still I feel that the pain, the regret and the fear isn't justified. Ah, well. Still, your words are GOLDEN and give my heart hope. Just like Star made me feel more confident about this. You made me think "I can do this." So thank you. Love, Saphira.

on Nov. 16 2013 at 8:43 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

It was so amazing that I just don't know what to say.... I can't formulate any comments that would give justice to this piece. It was gut-wrenching and unexpected. The question that you pose at the end brings the whole piece together. "What if I had been subject to that physics?" What. A. Powerful. Line. It is unsettling for one to think "That could have been me." I remember the 35w bridge collapse that happened a few years ago. My dad had crossed it an hour before it collapsed. It was very eerie to know that he was one of the lucky ones. This is unlike any other poem I have ever read. Keep up the good work! ~Lexy

on Nov. 13 2013 at 8:59 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

Same to you! ^.^ It has been too long since I've been on TeenInk, but I am trying to get back into it. My hope is that reading lots of other's work will help pull me out of the lull I've been in lately (I won't jinx it by calling it writer's block just yet :P) Anyway, I always enjoy reading new stuff of yours, and hopefully I will be able to do more of that soon. :)

on Nov. 13 2013 at 11:09 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Wow thank YOU! :D Thank you. Thank you. And hey, I AM DEFINITELY reading your stuff! I didn't get the chance to open any stuff until today but you bet I will and now that you've told me you write this way. I can't wait. Love always, Saphira.

on Nov. 13 2013 at 11:07 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

cut-off in mid-sentence. Anyway. Love you so much. thank you so much. And miss you so much.

on Nov. 13 2013 at 11:06 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

T H A N K Y O U ever so much. Star. That was the most beautiful thing to say. And well, that's just because of the theme it had to be that way, chilling I mean.. and thank gosh, I thought it wouldn't flow well when others read it. :D

on Nov. 11 2013 at 7:51 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

B E A U T I F U L  writing, Saphira! There is something very chilling and intriguing about this, which really draws me in. Your rhyme scheme flows quite nicely as well, and it all seems to fit with the theme of the poem. Great work! :)

on Nov. 11 2013 at 5:54 pm
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
33 articles 0 photos 140 comments

Favorite Quote:
Thou may think of me as desired, to idolize or villanize me whichever you may choose. but gaze upon me and thou sall not see the husk of a man! for all my sins and all my bliss, i am anything but hollow
-Ansem_Unlimited

I could best describe this as a poetic pro, and i write primarily in this general format, it may seem like ranting sometimes but when you get down to it you find out that it has a flow of its own without a rythme scheme! (PS this article was anything BUT a chain wreck keep up the good work)  :}

on Sep. 20 2013 at 10:44 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Wow, Thank you. That means so much! I guess this one just really came to me after I saw it all, I was just thinking how all these things have such huge implications in reality that we never seem to consider. Thank you so much for reading.

on Sep. 18 2013 at 10:11 pm
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
13 articles 1 photo 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.

You are only as strong as your weakest link.

The end was chilling :O Especially something taught at school being related to real life accidents, very shocking. I like this poem's perspective, how it's both science-y and emotional. 

on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:52 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Thank You nelehjr and Em. Thank you both for the feedback and the appreciation and Em, wow that is so good to know, cause I really wasn't sure about this one. These comments made my day :)) Love you both.

on Sep. 13 2013 at 6:12 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead;
I lift my lids and all is born again.
(I think I made you up inside my head)."
-Sylvia Plath

Wow. This is really good. "What if I had been subject to that physics"--holy wow, what an imaginative line! I love how you organized it too, with Action, Reaction, and Spectator. The only disaster is the one you witnessed, the poem itself is beautiful in a sad, cruel sort of way, making it very powerful.

on Sep. 13 2013 at 2:58 pm
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
60 articles 11 photos 381 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

Wow. That's all I can say really. Reading this poem I feel like a spectator myself. Wow.


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