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Still Blue

The translucent ocean
matches the blue of your eyes
I remember a time
where life passed us by

A time so far away, now
I can't remember the feel of your touch,
or how
I remembered the still blue of your eyes

They captivated my very being
your still blue eyes
Even without me seeing
you for so long

Even now the tingle of
flesh on flesh
Still brings on hot flashes
of cold regrets

Your still blue eyes
are nomore
for they don't
captivate me anymore

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Liv.HarrisThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 1:17 pm:
This is a very powerful piece, and I coyuld really feel the emotion in it :) Please keep writing, this was so well done! I liked the comparisons of blue to the ocean, and the way you set up the poem, it really made it stand out :)  
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hatefulgirl said...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 1:59 am:
the thought of it is very nice ... 
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Lovessunlight said...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 12:25 am:
make sure to double check your work It's great otherwise and you can use punctuation in poetry if you want, some might help it read more smoothly
Beaniebaby123 replied...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 6:13 pm :
Thanks for the feedback
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