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Free Fall

July 29, 2013
By Lyinheart SILVER, Harrisonburg, Virginia
Lyinheart SILVER, Harrisonburg, Virginia
7 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Failing isn't just for failures, it's for everybody. Failures just have more experience." - Dan Smith


I'm falling for you.

Grasping clue-

lessly for something

to break my fall.

But the rope I'm grasping for

has been gnawed.

I'm hopelessly falling

with nothing to stop me.

Ironically

this is the first time I feel free.

Free of the ropes of rejection

and false perfection.

I can hear you screaming.

Telling me to try just a little bit harder.

To grasp onto the rope.

But if those bonds are my last hope,

then I have none.

If the only thing that can save me

is my insecurities.

Then I don't want to be saved.

The pain in that "security" isn't worth it.

They make me feel like a slave.

I'm calling for you.

to fall with me too.

But the ropes are enticing.

Telling you if you only serve them

they will always be your friend.

Now, that's a lie.

All they want to do it tie.

You down.

Just cut free,

and fall with 

 

 

me.



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Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 31 2013 at 2:08 pm
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
65 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened.
- Thomas Jefferson

This is awesome! "Free of the ropes of rejection and false perfection." I love this line. I really like your work!

on Jul. 31 2013 at 9:57 am
Lyinheart SILVER, Harrisonburg, Virginia
7 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Failing isn't just for failures, it's for everybody. Failures just have more experience." - Dan Smith

I know! alot of my poems are meant for spoken word. but the formatting here sucks lol

on Jul. 31 2013 at 12:29 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I really liked this. There are some places where commas and periods were misplaced or absent, but overall I loved the idea and the way it was written. I hate how TI makes you choose a picture, and it changes the formatting O: I can tell it's supposed to read differently...Anyways, my favorite line was "But the rope I'm grasping for has been gnawed" ....... I'd give this poem a 4 1/2 out of 5 stars, keep it up :D 

on Jul. 30 2013 at 11:45 pm
Lyinheart SILVER, Harrisonburg, Virginia
7 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Failing isn't just for failures, it's for everybody. Failures just have more experience." - Dan Smith

you have no idea what that means to me! I've always been self conscious about my work. Thank you so much :)

MMOON PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 4:10 pm
MMOON PLATINUM, Bellingham, Washington
26 articles 1 photo 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sop being afriad of what could go wrong. Start being positive about what could go right"
I also have another "Loving someone is like hugging a cactus. The harder you hold the more it hurts"

This poem is absolutely beautiful! I love it so much. The diction, maturity and the passion is just amazing. You are an amazing poet. Keep writing!