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The voices in my head,
Are all screaming at me now,
"You idiot!" they yell,
Scolding me for refusing to bow.

My eyesight is blurry,
My tears still falling,
I hide face from you,
So you won't see me dying.

It's your fault, you know,
You had to be so charming,
So sweet and dependable,
Your words always so loving.

I tried to put on the brakes,
But by the I was in too deep,
Now I desperately pray,
That I will slip away in my sleep.

There is a hole in my heart,
Where you used to be,
I am being swallowed by the dark,
As I know you will never fall for me.

I wish I could go back,
And fix all my mistakes,
Fall for another, perhaps,
I would do all it takes.

I still hate myself,
For ever believing it was true,
That you actually cared,
You have sliced me right through.

Why should I love you?
You only have time for her,
It could never happen in this world,
So my life remains a blur.

I should've fought to the death,
Pried my heart from your grip,
But your words were a soft caress,
And seeing you made my stomach flip.

It is too late for change,
Tonight will be the end,
I shall enter the dark embrace,
That death offers to send.



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Kait-DreamsOfGoldThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 30, 2013 at 6:32 pm:
Lisa, even though you say your work is bad, I do not believe you. I may have, however, if I had never read this... This piece shows [lost] love, and, however you might strain to make the pain away, you learn that, although it never goes away, it is bearable... And it talks about the regrets of finding love in the first place ... The only thing I see is that the verses are rather choppy, but just a few; you do not always need a comma to seperate a verse; you can just let it run smoothly. I give t... (more »)
 
FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 2, 2013 at 9:54 am :
Great job Lisa, And your trying to fool us all that your not  good. This was brilliant this poem shows sadness, depression, lost but also hope in the end when your learn that it was bearable i completely agree with dreams of gold. Keep writeing Lisa because you are gonig to go far.
 
BalladOfMonaLisa replied...
Aug. 3, 2013 at 11:49 am :
Thank you, Kait and Luna! And yes, I am considering starting writing without all the commas so that it just flows... I don't know yet though.
 
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Wings10FeetTall said...
Jul. 23, 2013 at 3:59 pm:
Great job, Lisa! 
 
BalladOfMonaLisa replied...
Aug. 3, 2013 at 11:50 am :
Thanks, Andy.
 
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HazelGrace said...
Jul. 17, 2013 at 3:37 pm:
This is freaking amazing. Gah I can't even deal with your depressing brillance. (that's a compliemnt :))  
 
BalladOfMonaLisa replied...
Aug. 3, 2013 at 12:09 pm :
Hahaha thanks Hazel XD I like to think that my depressing writing turns out better than the rest...
 
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Waistband said...
Jul. 17, 2013 at 1:44 am:
I really like this poem. Very organized and very well though out and relatable. Definitely passionate and very understandable. :)  
 
BalladOfMonaLisa replied...
Aug. 3, 2013 at 12:08 pm :
Thank you! I love to write, so I am glad it is relatable..
 
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JeremiahSamuelTempleThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 12, 2013 at 3:15 am:
I know the feeling and this one is pretty good, there are just a few rough spots in the meter, however. The rhyme is good and consistent.
 
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