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Looking Glass

June 4, 2013
By nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.


I saw a woman in my window this morning
“Who are you?!”
I exclaimed in fear.
Astonished, I realized she was me.

When did she become me?
I’m only a girl!
Not a woman…

This woman was beautiful.
Her pale oval face
Was dotted with freckles
Her soft brown hair caressed her cheeks.

Not so with me.
My round, doughy, face
Is plagued by acne.
My long brown hair falls in
Tentacle like tresses down my back.

Her blue eyes were open wide.
She was as frightened as I was.
Her pink lips parted as if she were about to speak.
Behind them I could see two white teeth.

My eyes aren’t right.
They are dim.
I need glasses or contacts.
My lips are to big.
To big for my trumpet at least.
My teeth have a yellow tinge
From the coffee that makes me human.

She wore no make-up
Neither do I.
She wore my sunglasses
On top of her head.
Just like I do…
…I remember having freckles
…Before the zits at least
Our eyes are both blue.
And we both have brown hair…

Could she really be me?
Does this mean I am a woman?
Am I as beautiful as she?
…Oh wait.
I forgot.
She is me.


The author's comments:
The morning of art symposium I caught a glimpse of myself in the backseat window of my car and truely frightened myself! I almost screamed "Aah! Why is there a woman in the back seat of my car?!...She's prettier than me..." And then I realized it was my reflexion. The whole expirence troubled me so much I wrote a poem about it.

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on Jun. 10 2013 at 11:36 am
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
60 articles 11 photos 381 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

Thank you very much! And thank you for the addvice! Verb tense is something I need to work on in general, even in my story writing... Again, thank you very much!

SongBird04 said...
on Jun. 10 2013 at 1:22 am
SongBird04, Littleton, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
You've gotta take the good with the bad, smile when you're sad, love what you got and remember what you had. Always forgive but never forget, learn from your mistakes but never regret. People change and things go wrong but always remember life goes on

Ahh! I love this! It's very creative! The only thing I'd say to work on is the verb tense; it's a little shaky when it switches from past to present. But that's only a minor thing. It's really a great poem!! Keep writing! :)


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