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I'd Like to Tell the World

May 20, 2013
By kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy


I'd like to tell the world what I'm all about,
But I don't believe they'd listen, I can't let it out.
Would they laugh?
Would they cry?
Would they leave me alone?
Would they answer if I called, or hit reject on their phone?
I'd like to tell the world why I'm hurting inside,
But I doubt that they'd hear me, I could only silently cry.
The people only see what they want to,
They turn their heads at the poor.
If you were sick they'd just leave you,
Nobody would answer their door,
I'd like to tell the world how to laugh, how to breathe,
But I know they'd think I'm lying, I'm someone they can't believe.
When you fall, hit the ground
Would you know how to heal?
Or would you lay there, breathing slowly
Since the world told not to feel?
I'd like to tell the world how to quit with their lies,
But my words never make it, my voice wavers and dies.



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on Mar. 11 2015 at 11:51 am
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Gosh this poem is incredible! I think the rhyme makes it a little more musical and makes it more memorable. And I love your message. Very somber and deep, it really makes you think. Great job!

on Mar. 8 2015 at 10:52 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

I like the idea here, of a message in poetry to the world, but I think the rhyme was unnecessary. You could have done better if you just let the words flow like you do in some of your other poems.

on Sep. 4 2014 at 6:36 pm
emilyxclifford BRONZE, San Marcos,
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"lead me, save me from my solitude"

HEY! I am really good friends with our sister! Mr Piro read some of your work today in class, and i couldn't stop going on and on anout how genuis you are! Pure. Genius. You are my poetry idol! Im not the best at poetry but i enjoy it a lot. I am so excited to read your work. Thanks!

on Aug. 5 2013 at 7:32 pm
SwanSong SILVER, Millville, New Jersey
9 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take but by the moments that take our breath away."

I love the message of this poem. I tend to like it when the meaning of poems are hidden with metaphors, but I think the straigt forwardness really works here. I was drawn by the title of this and I wasn't disapointed. The rhythm at the beginning and the end are really strong and it sounds like it could be a song, but you lose that in the middle. Other than that, I love this and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!

on Aug. 5 2013 at 6:23 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
1 article 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

I can really connect with this poem. It made me think about myself and wonder what would happen if I spoke my mind. I like how you made this poem rhyme. I can't describe how much I love this poem, and the other poems I have read of yours! You are an amazing poet!!

on Jun. 13 2013 at 12:34 am
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

That's so nice of you to say (: thanks!

on Jun. 13 2013 at 12:33 am
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

Thank you so much, I will (:

on Jun. 13 2013 at 12:32 am
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

I appreciate that (:

on Jun. 11 2013 at 9:44 pm
WrenArrington, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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Great rhyme scheme, and the questions helped make it better. The last couple lines wrapped it up nicely.

on Jun. 10 2013 at 3:48 am
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 149 comments
Wow, just wow. I mean, what are you? This is so good! You are so good! I find this piece very witty. I have to say you have done a phenomenal job. Keep it up, and keep writing. <3 

on Jun. 8 2013 at 7:46 pm
RozaAlexander, Amory, Mississippi
0 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
rumors are carried by haters, spread by fools, & accepted by idiots.

I love this sooooo much, this is truly amazing. And i would listen to you, everything you say is just, i dont know how to describe but you are worth listening.

on Jun. 3 2013 at 6:38 pm
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

Thank you so much!

on Jun. 1 2013 at 6:02 pm
Childofthemind BRONZE, San Marcos, California
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DONT GIVE AWAY MY SECRET IDENTITY! now ill have to kill everyone who saw this poem  

on May. 31 2013 at 3:26 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If it weren’t for the coffee, I’d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.” –David Letterman

I love all of these spectacular questions here! You really make me think with your poem, and that's a talent writers everywhere need to have :D Great job!

on May. 29 2013 at 6:18 pm
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

Thank you Dylan!!

on May. 29 2013 at 6:18 pm
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

Thank you so so so much!!! Feedback is always appreciated, I'm so thankful for people like y'all who read and tell me what they think (:

on May. 29 2013 at 5:10 pm
Childofthemind BRONZE, San Marcos, California
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Kiki i am so glad that you dont delete all of your work because it is amazing! and yeah lexus you should definitely read her other work it is super awesome! but great poem (as always)   

on May. 29 2013 at 11:05 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Wow!! That was so wonderful and passionate and questioning and a thousand more things that would drive you crazy because of how long this sentence is! It was so truthful and amazing, the best poets are the ones that don't hide the truth behind pretty words but the ugly ones that really slap people in the face. I think that you are one of the real poets, the ones that ask a lot of questions in their poetry and force the reader to try and answer it themselves! Great job!!

on May. 28 2013 at 11:46 pm
kikixkupkake GOLD, San Marcos, California
17 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The things that walk out when we open our minds." -Dylan McCoy

Every time you comment, I feel so good. I am so happy you found me, not because I like compliments, but because you make me feel like writing. I honestly can't express how much I doubt myself when I post, I almost delete it because im afraid someone will hate it. I want to please everyone, which I definitely can't. But when I read your comments I know I've pleased at least two people: you, and myself. Because knowing that someone read it and cared makes me feel proud. I seriously love you, haha! Thank you so much, I'm hoping to post more this week. Thank you for reading

on May. 27 2013 at 1:18 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

KIKI. I FINALLY FOUND YOU. I FELT LIKE FRODO AND SAM LOOKING FOR MORDOR WHEN LOOKING FOR YOU. I HAVE BEEN ON A JOURNEY TO FIND THE WONDERFUL POET WHO WROTE 'If You Look Deeper Within My Walls' AND I FINALLY HAVE COMPLETED MY JOURNEY. And I would like to tell the world how wonderful you are at writing poetry. I loved the title. I loved the picture. I loved everything as a whole. I love the simplicity of this and the deeper meaning it all leads up to. I enjoyed all of the questions, I think questions make poems so interesting and entertaining. They make the reader ask themself the same questions. And they take the poem on a deeper level and completely take it in. I loved everything about this. And I hope you know that I'm a fan and I will be back to read more of your work now that I have found you! Seriously, I am so happy. And though I must sound like a stalker, I don't care at this point. Haha. Talk to you later!