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Wolves Among Sheep

May 6, 2013
By LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.


Atop this mountain, neither star nor moon will shine
but from up here I see the miserable city aglow with lovely lights.
I look behind a pine tree and I am not sure of what I see
right there in the darkness, a lonesome figure gleams.
Is this the drowning voice that was sent to guide me?
Or is this a figure to make me reminisce my misery?
My hands go numb and my stomach doubles up
because now I hear it, the howling of a large wolf pup.
If you’re here to test my will, I’ll tell you that I’m weak.
If you’re here to take my soul, I’ll tell you that it’s free.
You can invite all the red ribbon foxes and grizzlies
because I no longer posses dignity.. I’ll go ahead and get on my knees.
You stand so still as you expand your wide jaw
and while I wait for the torture I hear the crows caw.
I came here searching for a place to rest my bones,
but now I am only afraid of the unknown.
I hear the quick steps of a fox and bear approaching,
my mind quickly wants to stop working.
I’ve lived a life with no witness, what a lonely business.
No one to ever rise with, no one that I can die with.
You’re evidence that I’ve lived life such a fail,
once you’ve killed me just let my skeleton lay frail.
My body feels the heat of the setting sun
and now I am thinking that I ought to run.
You all are wolves and I am the sheep
your eyes are starting to quietly taunt me.
I look to you for saving but you’ll only save yourselves,
then with the utmost sincerity you cut me free from the ropes of hell.



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on Aug. 1 2013 at 12:05 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Thanks again for the comment! and hi no time no see :2. Okay so i really loved your imagery and how you purtayed your charachter up until the end i had no idea your main hcaracter was a sheep. And your word chocie was brilliant. I just lvoed everything about this. It also has a erie dark tone t it which is brilliant in its own. overall amazing job 5/5 stars no doudt.

on May. 29 2013 at 1:41 pm
JH2974-A SILVER, Sweet Home, Oregon
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Happiness on earth ain't just for high achievers."- Ronnie Dunn

Love the imagery in this, and you give a nice background for your character. "Atop this mountain, neither star nor moon will shine
but from up here I see the miserable city aglow with lovely lights." Great line to pull me into this great poem.
 

on May. 28 2013 at 11:25 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

This is such a great poem! I see what you were saying, about how our poems seems almost interconnected!! Great job, it's so fluid in its text and seems so dark! I love it so much!

OldYoungOne said...
on May. 24 2013 at 12:02 pm
As a nature lover I love this poem and feel the darkness envelope me like smoke -- but in a good way. I wonder if that makes sound depressedd... but none the less I like it

on May. 23 2013 at 12:13 pm
Someone2know BRONZE, Council Bluffs, Iowa
4 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont let your insecurities ruin the beauty you were born with.(:

This is beautiful!!:) <3

on May. 21 2013 at 7:25 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Very deep, very dark but very beautiful. I love it :D. You are very talented, write on :). Can't wait to read more of your poetry. 

on May. 20 2013 at 9:34 pm
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. " FFDP "You're born alone and you die alone" FFDP "I wonder out where you can't see, inside my shell I wait and bleed." Slipknot " If youre 555 then I am 666"

This poem has a very dark theme to it. I personally really enjoyed every aspect of it! My favorite lines were,"I’ve lived a life with no witness, what a lonely business. No one to ever rise with, no one that I can die with. " this is overall amazing flow, great rhyme, strong diction, just everything a great poem needs! You are very talented!

on May. 16 2013 at 12:18 am
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

Wow. I know a poem is great when I keep re-reading it and discovering new intracacies within it. This is seriously an awesome poem.  It certainly has an edge to it- a sort of darkness - that's really interesting.  I could be completely off, but it sounds to me like it's about suicide - the narrator feels worthless throughout the piece and then there's the "cut me free from the ropes of hell."  But again, I could be totally off - which is why I love this poem!  I feel like so many different meaning could be extracted from it - it's really brilliant.  Great work, Lexus!

on May. 13 2013 at 6:07 pm
PotterWhoLocked GOLD, Montclair, Virginia
13 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Wednesdays are limbo days. Monday is the beginning of the week, Tuesday is getting used to it, Thursday is looking forward to Friday and Friday is getting ready for the weekend. Wednesdays aren’t really anything in particular. They’re just there.”

I really like this. Like Mckay said, it's very dark. I also like how it didn't rhyme straight away. Well done.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 13 2013 at 4:11 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I like the new darkness vibe in this poem. Very dark. But I love it. You'll never disappoint will you? not that I want you to. ^u^ I love hte imagery you painted. Everything about it is good. 

on May. 13 2013 at 3:59 pm
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

This is beautiful! Great job!

on May. 13 2013 at 10:50 am
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

One could write a book on her greatness :P

on May. 12 2013 at 10:16 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Haha! Lexus is great right? Awesome job, if I didn't say that in my extremely long peice o_O

on May. 12 2013 at 9:56 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

Yes all of that and MORE<3

on May. 12 2013 at 9:55 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

Ok first off, you are such a wonderful poet! All the poems that i've read from you are wonderful and glorious! This one has to be your best work. It's relatable, it's vivid, it has a dark meaning as well. You never fail to produce such a fine work! Great job and happy poetry writing!

on May. 12 2013 at 9:49 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Lexus this is great! I tried to post three comments before this, so if they show up later, I am sorry. Right now, it’s not working. So basically, I LOVE THIS SOOOOOO MUCH! You are a genius who can really capture the spirit and spark of a horror movie, I mean, the words and phrases, not to mention the picture paired with this, were so vivid I was watching it like a movie inside my head!!!! Great job, really. Okay, next part. Some people might say that this is a literal wolf and sheep fight, but I think that it could symbolize many things, and I am a real sucker for symbolisms and show and tell. Great job. I think that this could symbolize bullying. Like the wolf-pack are the bullies and the sheep is the victim. So vivid, and I love how it tells a story. You could make a pretty sick video out of this, like for one of those bullying campaigns. Is that pushing it? Nah, you deserve the praise <3 Okay, next part, I promise that we are almost done, just one more thing: my favorite line. When you/ they say “is this the drowning voice that was sent to save me?” my heart literally stopped (and I kinda memorized it), and though I wasn’t even near the end, I still was like, copy/paste into memory, this is my favorite line. And as like you say, it was faultless and priceless. Perfect. Okay, that’s all for now. <3 Keep rockin and writing Lexus

on May. 12 2013 at 9:34 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Okay, my first comment got deleted and it really pissed me off, cuz I spent like 10 minutes writing that thing! Okay, to get to your FRIKIN AMAZING POEM!!!! I loved it soo much Lexus. I loved how the words and the imagery were like set in like a horror ovie setting, and I was actually getting scared as I was reading it, because it was that vivid of a movie inside my mind!!! Great, great job. You know though, it dosen't just symbolize that a wolf is hunting sheep. To me it can symbolize bullying. Like the pack of bullies (cuz there is never just one) targeting the victim. The "wolf" and "sheep" are just like actors for the main roles. I mean, you could insert anything in there, if you get what I am saying. What I mean, since I am not really amking sence, is that not only can this be about bullying, but maybe self esteem, like the wolf and sheep are part of you and you are fighting with yourself.... i don't know. Just a thought, but as you can tell, this poem/story really makes you think. If i didnt say this before, I was watching it as  was reading like a movie in my mind. Thats hard t accomplis, and you pulled it off pretty freaking well :) No, I am not done yet, but hey you deserve the praise! Okay, the title: GENIUS!!! If i had never seen your work before, I would have picked this one because the title is so damn good!!! Okay, almost done, don't worry. I just have to tell you my favoritte line and then we will end with my signature ;) okay,, so my favorite line is: "is this the drowning voice that was sent to guide me?" Okay, sooooo creepy.. but genius! any way, great job and........keep rockin Lexus!!!

on May. 12 2013 at 9:11 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Wow Lexus, this is deep, on so many levels. Amazing. Just Wow. My favorite line is "Is this the drowning voice that was sent to guide me?" because I just thought that it was so clear the fear in this persons voice. This is one of those peices that tells a story, it was like a movie was playing inside my head. Brilliant job Lexus, and I am not just saying that. Oh, and the title: LOVE IT!!! Great title. If I had gone to your page for the first time, I wold have picked this piece because the title is striking. Beautiful blend of rhyming and the like sharp aspects of the hillside and the wolves. I love how the rhyming softens it in a way, and then you have this like horror movie scene with this "wolf" and "sheep" In a way, I can percieve this as like bullying because the person is questioning whats going on, and when kids bully other kids, they usually do it in packs (I would know). So anyway, I just wanted to say hi (since it litterally has been forever since we talked), and I wanted to tell you that this peice is he bomb.com Love, Love, Love it! Amazing job Lexus (not that I was expecting otherwise) Keep rockin and writing <3