If I fall

May 2, 2013
By Desiraay GOLD, Billerica, Massachusetts
Desiraay GOLD, Billerica, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's sad to think how many people are shocked by honesty and so few by lies
(Changed it up a little from a book I read)


If I fall
I will get back up
If I fall
I will stand up and
brush myself off
If I fall
I will ask for help
For everyone falls
and
this fall is called life...


The author's comments:
Just came too me(:

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Desiraay GOLD said...
on May. 8 2013 at 7:20 pm
Desiraay GOLD, Billerica, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's sad to think how many people are shocked by honesty and so few by lies
(Changed it up a little from a book I read)

thanks for the advice i did have more but i forget it somewherer so im still looking for it(:

Desiraay GOLD said...
on May. 8 2013 at 7:19 pm
Desiraay GOLD, Billerica, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's sad to think how many people are shocked by honesty and so few by lies
(Changed it up a little from a book I read)

thanks alot(: tell me if you want me to comment/read anything!

on May. 8 2013 at 7:11 pm
Trace.C.Schuelke PLATINUM, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Secrets are secrets for a reason, and some do not wish to see them uncovered. Especially when the secrets are particularly unseemly..."

This poem seems to emphasize simplicity built around a short and sweet style. While I do like the message and the metaphor you use at the end, I feel as though you could have given a vast number more of imagery, detail, and overall description, while still maintaining a shotened structure. Still, the shortness of it does make it easily readable, and I liked what I read.

Pusheen612 said...
on May. 8 2013 at 7:09 pm
Pusheen612, Lake Oswego, Oregon
0 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can shake off everything as I write; my sorrows disappear, my courage is reborn," -Anne Frank

This is a very well written poem and it has a little moral hidden in there. I like it. Keep it up!!


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