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Shiny red flowers on my bookmark align.
Shines bright red under the sunny sky.
Shiny red flowers to brighten the day-
Shiny red flowers to stay.

Shiny red flowers in my hair.
Shiny red flowers on my gown.
Shiny red flowers all over the ground.
Shiny red flowers, crisp and promising,
For when the wind rustles through them-
It is soothing.



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LaChouette This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 28, 2013 at 1:59 pm
Hi JoyMason! This is a really nice poem! I think you're trying to go for a rhyming scheme here, but if not, you can let me know! If you are, I think it's pretty good. Some of the lines are longer than others and don't quite match in tempo. I think after 'Shiny red flowers in my hair' there could be another line that rhymes with hair, but it's up to you. I still think it's a nice poem. Great Job!
 
JoyMasonThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 10, 2013 at 3:58 pm
thanx, i wuz kinda going 4 da rhyme, but not so much that it would just be a rhyming competition with myself, not to seem funny, but that's really how it would sound. this was like, 1 of the only poems that isn't, well, gruesome or sad that i have wrote, i wuz like really confused about 2 write with this thanx again. 0u0
 
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