A Tropical Paradise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

September 10, 2008
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Lying on the beach
With sunglasses on your face
Shielding the harsh sunlight from your eyes.
You cover your skin with SPF 25.
Sand makes its way into your sandals,
but you don’t mind.
Off in the distance music is being played
on steel drums.
They set the mood of your whole vacation:
You see the boats drift by with their brightly
colored sides
And you hold onto your tropical drink that tastes
like bananas
With its tiny umbrella hanging off the side.
It makes you smile.
You wonder if the sailors on the boat are as
peaceful as you are.
Worries escape you as you drift into your own oasis
And your home life becomes something of the past.
Almost unreal.
You smell coconut everywhere you go
And wonder if you’ll miss it when you leave.
All you hear is the crashing of the waves.
All you can feel is your newly burnt skin.
All that matters is nothing.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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StarlightStormcloud said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 12:13 am
This is just a couple sentences with random line breaks.  It captures being at the beach because that's all it describes!  Seriously, where are the poems with true dimension?  
shootingdreams replied...
Jun. 25, 2010 at 8:04 pm

I third! I just kind of don't see the..passion and emotion...

It doesn't lift me up. Sure, going to the beach is great, but why should it matter?

Kaptain replied...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 8:32 am

would love to know what u guys think about my stuff.. please do check it out..

thanks in advance :)

RideTheWave replied...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 5:22 pm

i agree as well. it didn't speak to me or have any meaning or depth. it was an awesome description though!!!!!


ScarletThread said...
May 12, 2010 at 11:21 pm

awesome!!! you did a great job capturing what it's like to be at the beach!

keep it up, madison!!!!!!

Addison J. said...
May 12, 2010 at 4:02 pm
so good. love it(:
sparkofheart said...
May 12, 2010 at 3:38 pm
this was soo amazing!! i loved it amazing imagery :) i actually wrote one about a beach scene too...check it out and critique please? TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/206088/Paradise/
jonas_chic899 said...
Apr. 20, 2010 at 12:48 pm
omggg that like brought me to the beach!! love it!!!!!!!
mcpanicfanic said...
Apr. 20, 2010 at 2:25 am
I love that last line. This poem is amazing. I wish i were on a beach!
Xilaberry said...
Mar. 29, 2010 at 6:13 pm
What I really love about this is that nothing you're saying matters in the grand scheme of things, and that's the point. Life doesn't always need to be full of deep meaning and big ideas. Keep up the good work.
notebookgirl said...
Mar. 29, 2010 at 8:04 am
ugh it is muddy and rainy and disgusting where i live and i think im going to read this poem over and over again until it teleports me to said tropical island
steff123456789 replied...
Mar. 29, 2010 at 10:51 am
OH GRRRRRRL. me too. it's been rainin all day and all night for 40 days and 40 nights. lemme know how da beach is, you know. i'm tryna meetchu up in there, you know. luh ya.
Alisha62293 replied...
Mar. 29, 2010 at 11:18 am

this is a really pretty poem, your choice of word are amazing. keep up the good work =D

can you look at some of mine and let me know what you think? thanks.

meghan107 said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 8:34 am
I really liked this poem because I felt like I was actually on the beach in the Caribbean.
Thinker replied...
May 12, 2010 at 12:29 pm
I have always wanted to go to a tropical beach, this is probably the closest I've ever gotten.
Arrow said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 6:06 pm
Wow! Amazing! This is a beautiful poem, I love the flow of the words.
kimmycakes said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 1:41 pm
this is really good keep writing
Amanda13 said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 12:56 pm
great poem! you can really feel like your on the beach and everything! AMAZING! love it so much 5 stars
riley1516 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 10:50 am
Great poem! You really captured the feel of being on vacation!
alwayswriting14 said...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 8:35 am
I loved it!!! You captured the feelings of someone on vaction...thanks, i felt like i was there.
bmmsth said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 9:34 am
I love this poem...it makes me think of going to the beach know...very thoughtful and well said...very good job
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