A Tropical Paradise MAG

September 10, 2008
By Madison Fisher PLATINUM, New City, New York
Madison Fisher PLATINUM, New City, New York
28 articles 2 photos 2 comments

Lying on the beach
With sunglasses on your face
Shielding the harsh sunlight from your eyes.
You cover your skin with SPF 25.
Sand makes its way into your sandals,
but you don’t mind.
Off in the distance music is being played
on steel drums.
They set the mood of your whole vacation:
relaxation.
You see the boats drift by with their brightly
colored sides
And you hold onto your tropical drink that tastes
like bananas
With its tiny umbrella hanging off the side.
It makes you smile.
You wonder if the sailors on the boat are as
peaceful as you are.
Worries escape you as you drift into your own oasis
And your home life becomes something of the past.
Almost unreal.
You smell coconut everywhere you go
And wonder if you’ll miss it when you leave.
All you hear is the crashing of the waves.
All you can feel is your newly burnt skin.
All that matters is nothing.



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1234567 said...
on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:24 am
I really think the picture is pretty , when you wrote this you could actually see the picture in your mind besides looking at it.

on Feb. 23 2011 at 12:37 am
Internal-Love PLATINUM, Queens, New York
33 articles 3 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing's black or white, its all just a shade of gray---

















TI "Live your Life" ft Rihanna

this poem can pass as lyrics to a song!! Nice work!

foxbox BRONZE said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 9:36 pm
foxbox BRONZE, Hudson, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
For my part I know nothing with any certainty, but the sight of the stars makes me dream.

Wow, such an enjoyable read!

on Jan. 31 2011 at 7:43 am
the_real_reggie_rocket BRONZE, Spostylvania, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I like to move it, move it."-Anonymous

As I was reading this, it felt as if I was there with you. Great poem. I really enjoyed it.

alexwhite said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 12:50 am
Vivid, soothing

gman123 said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 9:15 am

this is a very relaxing poem

 


on Jan. 9 2011 at 4:40 pm
SideraCaeli GOLD, Marysville, Washington
13 articles 1 photo 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be yourself. Above all, let who you are, what you are, what you believe, shine through every sentence you write, every piece you finish.” -John Jakes.

This reminds me of when i went on vacation to hawaii.. awesome! Exactly how you described.

teenpoet8 said...
on Dec. 18 2010 at 8:59 pm
thats a wonderfully vivid poem!  youre so good at descriptive writing.  it was like i was there with you.  legit. (:

on Dec. 18 2010 at 12:55 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
11 articles 7 photos 175 comments

Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you're not. It about being who you are and finding someone
who loves every bit of it."

"Life's tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late"

Well you're hearing this from a miami girl. I LOVE THE BEACH. Great Job. I have also written several pieces about how much I love to visit the beach and how it makes me feel free. I have not posted them yet though. Anyway, I really liked this since I could relate. Check out some of my work if u can. thanks :)

red-i13 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 26 2010 at 7:27 pm
red-i13 BRONZE, Dferhjukifrtdghybjn, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The Only Thing We Have to Fear Is Fear Itself"
Quoted from Franklin D. Roosevelt

Your poem makes me feel like I am living it. I love being on the beach. To bad I can't go cause of stupid snow.

MRose911 GOLD said...
on Nov. 26 2010 at 12:41 am
MRose911 GOLD, Paradise, Utah
17 articles 10 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No boy is worth crying over and the one who is won't make you cry." - Sarah Kane

I felt like i was in your poem! Fabulous word choice! :)

on Nov. 4 2010 at 7:13 pm
Jakethesnake SILVER, Hernando, Mississippi
6 articles 0 photos 96 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Read, Read... Read everything, then write."-William Faulkner

This is awesome, my friend!  So glad I found this website! I've been looking for something to read for a while now!

on Oct. 27 2010 at 3:15 pm
Beautiful! I love the ocean, and this poem captured the essence of a lazy day at the beach. :) Nice job- keep up the good work!

vnj6607 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 26 2010 at 2:18 pm
vnj6607 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yo

Reading this totally made me want to take a cruise or something. I think I'm going to go home and talk to my mom about a possible vacation. The mood is relaxing. Gosh, I'm so desperate to be on a beach not.

on Oct. 13 2010 at 7:13 pm
Soccer33 SILVER, Niwot, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes determination to win, but to be a true soccer player you must have true passion for the game.

that was cool. i liked how you brought me ino the stort at the begining. 

on Oct. 13 2010 at 5:30 pm
squalur996 GOLD, Henderson, Nevada
10 articles 3 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If death meant just leaving the stage long enough to change costume and come back as a new character....would you slow down? Or speed up?
-- Chuck Palanick

What really got me was the coconut for some reason, and that it didn't rhyme. It all came together nicely.

 


on Oct. 13 2010 at 5:21 pm
CountryChic21 BRONZE, Bruceton Mills, West Virginia
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Side by side or miles apart, good friends are always close to the heart.

WOW!!!! This is amazing and way better than my trip to the beach. I got a very bad burn, lost the room key, and then hug out with some friends at the pool where i scraped my foot. 

on Oct. 13 2010 at 10:20 am
GreenLover SILVER, Anaheim, California
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Time is but a number

LOVED IT! that was so nicely written i give you a 5 star. i made me feel like i was there. i like poems that rhyme or have some sort of flow too it and yours does. nicee work look forward to reading more of your work  :)

on Sep. 21 2010 at 11:29 pm
thoughtfulsoul PLATINUM, El Cajon, California
25 articles 0 photos 49 comments
correction: oh i meant to say flowing breeze and not flowing beach :)

on Sep. 21 2010 at 11:27 pm
thoughtfulsoul PLATINUM, El Cajon, California
25 articles 0 photos 49 comments

I have to disagree with some of the people who dislike it, 'cause i really like it and I think it is good. the descriptions are good and I love how you can hear a hint of rhyming. the way the poem flowed reminded me of being at the beach with the flowing beach. (sorry that last line was kind of cheesy :))

 also, this is to everyone-please read, rate, and comment my work 'cause i could use some feedback whether its good or bad. Thanks!



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