A Tropical Paradise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

September 10, 2008
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Lying on the beach
With sunglasses on your face
Shielding the harsh sunlight from your eyes.
You cover your skin with SPF 25.
Sand makes its way into your sandals,
but you don’t mind.
Off in the distance music is being played
on steel drums.
They set the mood of your whole vacation:
You see the boats drift by with their brightly
colored sides
And you hold onto your tropical drink that tastes
like bananas
With its tiny umbrella hanging off the side.
It makes you smile.
You wonder if the sailors on the boat are as
peaceful as you are.
Worries escape you as you drift into your own oasis
And your home life becomes something of the past.
Almost unreal.
You smell coconut everywhere you go
And wonder if you’ll miss it when you leave.
All you hear is the crashing of the waves.
All you can feel is your newly burnt skin.
All that matters is nothing.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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the_real_reggie_rocket said...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 7:43 am
As I was reading this, it felt as if I was there with you. Great poem. I really enjoyed it.
gman123 said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 9:15 am

this is a very relaxing poem


alexwhite replied...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 12:50 am
Vivid, soothing
TotheSea replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 4:48 pm
Very soothing.
SideraCaeli said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 4:40 pm
This reminds me of when i went on vacation to hawaii.. awesome! Exactly how you described.
teenpoet8 said...
Dec. 18, 2010 at 8:59 pm
thats a wonderfully vivid poem!  youre so good at descriptive writing.  it was like i was there with you.  legit. (:
starlight26 said...
Dec. 18, 2010 at 12:55 pm
Well you're hearing this from a miami girl. I LOVE THE BEACH. Great Job. I have also written several pieces about how much I love to visit the beach and how it makes me feel free. I have not posted them yet though. Anyway, I really liked this since I could relate. Check out some of my work if u can. thanks :)
red-i13 said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 7:27 pm
Your poem makes me feel like I am living it. I love being on the beach. To bad I can't go cause of stupid snow.
MRose911 said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 12:41 am
I felt like i was in your poem! Fabulous word choice! :)
Jakethesnake said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 7:13 pm
This is awesome, my friend!  So glad I found this website! I've been looking for something to read for a while now!
TheMusicalFaery said...
Oct. 27, 2010 at 3:15 pm
Beautiful! I love the ocean, and this poem captured the essence of a lazy day at the beach. :) Nice job- keep up the good work!
vnj6607 said...
Oct. 26, 2010 at 2:18 pm
Reading this totally made me want to take a cruise or something. I think I'm going to go home and talk to my mom about a possible vacation. The mood is relaxing. Gosh, I'm so desperate to be on a beach not.
Soccer33 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 7:13 pm
that was cool. i liked how you brought me ino the stort at the begining. 
squalur996 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 5:30 pm

What really got me was the coconut for some reason, and that it didn't rhyme. It all came together nicely.


Lil_Riss said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 5:21 pm
WOW!!!! This is amazing and way better than my trip to the beach. I got a very bad burn, lost the room key, and then hug out with some friends at the pool where i scraped my foot. 
GreenLover said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:20 am
LOVED IT! that was so nicely written i give you a 5 star. i made me feel like i was there. i like poems that rhyme or have some sort of flow too it and yours does. nicee work look forward to reading more of your work  :)
thoughtfulsoul said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 11:27 pm

I have to disagree with some of the people who dislike it, 'cause i really like it and I think it is good. the descriptions are good and I love how you can hear a hint of rhyming. the way the poem flowed reminded me of being at the beach with the flowing beach. (sorry that last line was kind of cheesy :))

 also, this is to everyone-please read, rate, and comment my work 'cause i could use some feedback whether its good or bad. Thanks!

thoughtfulsoul replied...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 11:29 pm
correction: oh i meant to say flowing breeze and not flowing beach :)
DaydreamBeliever This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 6:34 pm
I absolutley loved it :) I'm one of those people who live for the beach though :P
emily12321 said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 6:04 pm

That is just like my trips to Mexico!

I loved it!

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