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Lying on the beach
With sunglasses on your face
Shielding the harsh sunlight from your eyes.
You cover your skin with SPF 25.
Sand makes its way into your sandals,
but you don’t mind.
Off in the distance music is being played
on steel drums.
They set the mood of your whole vacation:
relaxation.
You see the boats drift by with their brightly
colored sides
And you hold onto your tropical drink that tastes
like bananas
With its tiny umbrella hanging off the side.
It makes you smile.
You wonder if the sailors on the boat are as
peaceful as you are.
Worries escape you as you drift into your own oasis
And your home life becomes something of the past.
Almost unreal.
You smell coconut everywhere you go
And wonder if you’ll miss it when you leave.
All you hear is the crashing of the waves.
All you can feel is your newly burnt skin.
All that matters is nothing.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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billionaire said...
Jun. 20, 2012 at 8:42 pm
i like it,i like this poem..sounds peaceful
 
Indilove said...
May 7, 2012 at 8:13 am

Great visualization I want to go on this vacation!

 

 
Clean Dave said...
May 1, 2012 at 8:11 am
The writing set a relaxed feeling in me, you used good hyperboles to set the mood, and onomatopoeia and sounds made me feel like I was there.
 
beautifulspiritThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 7:43 am
Sounds like the perfect tropical vacation~ 
 
svds1 said...
Mar. 2, 2012 at 5:49 pm
Not to shabby :)
 
Fia-fia said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 7:58 pm
This was well written, thank you. :)
 
LUDACRIS said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 2:04 pm
i didnt like this book at all acually
 
Fia-fia replied...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 7:58 pm
"LUDACRIS" could u at least give some feedback instead of bluntly and rudely saying you don't like this.
 
LUDACRIS said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 2:03 pm
it was ok but i didnt like it
 
youngspeare said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 8:15 am
Well writing, I must say. The imagery is sharp. Please check out my poem"Ghosts of the Past". I would really appreciate your feedback. :)
 
PriscillaSmiles This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:24 pm
I love this. Describes just how i feel at the beach (: check out my work? thanks!
 
Dreammer said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:09 pm
Veary descriptive :p please read comment rate my work :P
 
cottoncandy28This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 2:08 pm
Truth is, your a very good writter. And I liked how you wrote about the ocean. That's my favorite place to be. The way you described it, made it seem like I was at the beach, even though it's almost Winter. There is not one line that was not perfect. The poem really inspired me. And your a very good writer. 
 
SimpleGuy said...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 9:04 pm
I could lietrally hear the ocean in my ear, awesome imagery absolutely awesome imagery, you didn't leave a single thing out, stellar.
 
purpleink said...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 11:37 am
I wish I was in a tropical paradise-i miss it. lol. love it!
 
AllCaughtUp said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 10:06 pm
This makes me with summer wasn't ending! Good job!
 
aveawave said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 9:00 pm
The last line is my favorite. :) Great Job! hey, would you mind checking out my work? Im new here, so Id like to get checked out and to be familiar with writers. Thanks!
 
TotheSea said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 4:41 pm
Great last line.
 
Lola_Black said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:33 pm
This totally makes me want to go on vacation! Nice writing : )
 
Bambi67 said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:03 pm
wow wish i was at the beach 2 lol... love it.. check out my writing thank =)
 
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