Summer Swims in the Sea MAG

September 8, 2008
By Sarah E., Rancho Cucamonga, CA, Rancho Cucamonga, CA

One hand, two hands: clasped.
We trudge through sand and sea.
The salty waters mean nothing;
We walk into them without a bit of hesitation.
Your hand, my hand:
Perhaps not close enough,
Bound by shadows of the past and lonely afternoons,
When we were left with only ourselves,
But we figured it out in the end.
You’re going north, I’m heading south,
But right here we’ve crossed paths,
Deciding to make the best of this accident.
A great and lovely collision.
Fingers clasped tightly:
For love and for air,
For something to do on a too-warm day.
We climb into the swaying current
And pull the tide over us,
Allowing me and you to be swept away in
The chaos and the confusion
In which we later take comfort
As the world melts away.
The fish fill our lungs,
Swimming through our very veins.
We gasp for a breath momentarily,
And find oxygen only in
Each other’s presence, our touch.
Two hands locked in one another:
Our hearts the key.



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HillaryJo said...
on Jul. 4 2011 at 4:10 pm
HillaryJo, Anderson, Indiana
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I really liked the way you tied the first few words of the poem back the the last. The end was my favorite but the entire thing was very nicely done. Great work!

reblep GOLD said...
on May. 21 2011 at 11:05 am
reblep GOLD, Chester, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
the sun through my window, warming my skin...

i love this! my favorite is the end when you talk about the fish in your viens. 

on Feb. 1 2011 at 10:40 am
singingdetective SILVER, Sugar Land, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Out of a world of laughter,
suddenly I am sad.
Day and night, it haunts me,
the kiss I never had"
--Midsummer by Syndey King Russell

"Chances lost are hope's torn up pages"-- "Chances" by Five for Fighting

Awww!! This is such as sweet poem. I must say, it's more sophistacted than the one I just read! I love the sentiment in it! FANTASTIC! :)

on Jan. 9 2011 at 5:34 pm
Hamleton SILVER, Ferris, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
There is not contradiction between diversity and excellence. -Barack Obama

Some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them. -Shakespeare

Let's try again....

 

 

This captures everything about the beach that i love. It's perfect.


on Jan. 9 2011 at 5:33 pm
Hamleton SILVER, Ferris, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is not contradiction between diversity and excellence. -Barack Obama

Some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them. -Shakespeare

This captures every thing that i feel at t

Kaitt PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 8 2010 at 6:24 pm
Kaitt PLATINUM, Petersburg, Virginia
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this is beautiful. your imagery is great, i can see myself there doing exactly that. i love how you kept the hand thing in the poem, it was kind of like the theme or what framed the poem. this is just really great, i love it (:

SuperNancy said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 9:06 pm
SuperNancy, Napa, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Replace the fear of the unknown with curiosity."

i really like this a lot.

& i like the picture that accompanies the poem


on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:36 pm
Nicole93 PLATINUM, Mechanicsburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the best two people to be together are the last two to realize it.

I looooove this:))

on Apr. 20 2010 at 2:26 am
mcpanicfanic SILVER, Cincinnati, Ohio
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This makes me wish I were at the beach. Its a great poem.

on Feb. 16 2010 at 11:01 pm
Allybaby BRONZE, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today"

Great poem. I would like to hear more, that was really nice. I am new to this website and I feel inspired

on Apr. 22 2009 at 10:26 pm
blackamethyst GOLD, Centerville, Ohio
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lovely

on Apr. 19 2009 at 11:33 pm
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"See in what peace a Christian can die." - Joseph Addison
"How come everyone will come to your funeral, but nobody will come see you when you are living?"

It reminds me of my dad and I. My parents are divorced. This poem has made my day! Thank you sooooo much!

bRonwYn_e GOLD said...
on Feb. 15 2009 at 4:05 pm
bRonwYn_e GOLD, Bon Aqua, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Denial is expected in the face of puuure eeevil.

I loved the line: 'decided to make the most of this accident.' hee hee!

tweedle dee said...
on Feb. 15 2009 at 12:02 am
ok, liked this alot untill "the fish fill our lungs" part. thought that was really weird, but other than that great job!


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