Summer Swims in the Sea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

September 8, 2008
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One hand, two hands: clasped.
We trudge through sand and sea.
The salty waters mean nothing;
We walk into them without a bit of hesitation.
Your hand, my hand:
Perhaps not close enough,
Bound by shadows of the past and lonely afternoons,
When we were left with only ourselves,
But we figured it out in the end.
You’re going north, I’m heading south,
But right here we’ve crossed paths,
Deciding to make the best of this accident.
A great and lovely collision.
Fingers clasped tightly:
For love and for air,
For something to do on a too-warm day.
We climb into the swaying current
And pull the tide over us,
Allowing me and you to be swept away in
The chaos and the confusion
In which we later take comfort
As the world melts away.
The fish fill our lungs,
Swimming through our very veins.
We gasp for a breath momentarily,
And find oxygen only in
Each other’s presence, our touch.
Two hands locked in one another:
Our hearts the key.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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HillaryJo said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 4:10 pm
I really liked the way you tied the first few words of the poem back the the last. The end was my favorite but the entire thing was very nicely done. Great work!
 
reblep said...
May 21, 2011 at 11:05 am
i love this! my favorite is the end when you talk about the fish in your viens. 
 
singingdetective said...
Feb. 1, 2011 at 10:40 am
Awww!! This is such as sweet poem. I must say, it's more sophistacted than the one I just read! I love the sentiment in it! FANTASTIC! :)
 
Hamleton said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 5:33 pm
This captures every thing that i feel at t
 
Hamleton replied...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 5:34 pm

Let's try again....

 

 

This captures everything about the beach that i love. It's perfect.

 
Kaitt This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 6:24 pm
this is beautiful. your imagery is great, i can see myself there doing exactly that. i love how you kept the hand thing in the poem, it was kind of like the theme or what framed the poem. this is just really great, i love it (:
 
Rosered93 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 1:36 pm
I looooove this:))
 
nancy! replied...
Aug. 6, 2010 at 9:06 pm

i really like this a lot.

& i like the picture that accompanies the poem

 
mcpanicfanic said...
Apr. 20, 2010 at 2:26 am
This makes me wish I were at the beach. Its a great poem.
 
Angelica S. said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 11:01 pm
Great poem. I would like to hear more, that was really nice. I am new to this website and I feel inspired
 
blackamethyst said...
Apr. 22, 2009 at 10:26 pm
lovely
 
bookwormdg said...
Apr. 19, 2009 at 11:33 pm
It reminds me of my dad and I. My parents are divorced. This poem has made my day! Thank you sooooo much!
 
tweedle dee said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 12:02 am
ok, liked this alot untill "the fish fill our lungs" part. thought that was really weird, but other than that great job!
 
chewsbooks said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 4:05 pm
I loved the line: 'decided to make the most of this accident.' hee hee!
 
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