Beautiful tears

April 8, 2013
By Gage1121 BRONZE, Santa Maria, California
Gage1121 BRONZE, Santa Maria, California
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The oncoming weather wafted to my senses
Like the lingering smoke from a man’s cigar.
Up from the asphalt came the soothing scent of the awaiting downpour
And down came the sparks of life’s mysterious gestures
One of the many great elements of life
I await these moments to calm and sooth my soul
Others fell threatened and frightened
What does the down pour bring?
Reminders of laughter washed away?
Reminders of pain that had once fallen?
There is safety in the rain as it cleans and makes anew


The author's comments:
weather affects everyone differently

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on Nov. 1 2013 at 12:58 am
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Reading this poem was like going on a journey. It is one of my favorites, and definiely deserves to be published. Please write more. :)

on Nov. 1 2013 at 12:55 am
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

I loved the imagery in this poem. The lines "Like the lingering smoke from a man's cigar" and "down came the sparks of life's mysterious gestures" were beautifully worded. I could visualize the scene in my head.... What I expected to be a sad poem made me feel peaceful. This poem is truly breathtaking.

Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 20 2013 at 6:22 pm
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
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Favorite Quote:
The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened.
- Thomas Jefferson

I love the first 3 phrases, amazing. Write more, haha.

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 14 2013 at 1:57 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

i love this! the moments right before a storm really are breathtaking and you captured it perfectly

on May. 17 2013 at 1:11 pm
monsterman0304 BRONZE, Florence, Kentucky
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loved it. amazing description and emotion

on May. 13 2013 at 10:23 am
annafranna BRONZE, Eldersburg, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened." ~Dr. Seuss

I really like your poem!  I love the message.

on May. 6 2013 at 9:13 pm
biblio9477 BRONZE, Manchester, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Even a toenail is heavy compared to air.

-Johnny Got His Gun by Dalton Trumbo

This reminded me something I haven't thought about in awhile, not since it first happened. It wasn't much, though, just a rainy morning in early July. I sat on my doorstep for an hour watching the rain and drinking cinnamon apple tea. My sister was inside watching TV. That memory is what I recall now to be one of the most precious gained that summer. Thank you for bringing it back with that beautiful poem. I loved especially how you used a series of rhetorical questions when drawing to a close. I know I was suddenly hoping for an extension! You did a great job here. Thank you again.

Abelinks GOLD said...
on May. 6 2013 at 10:59 am
Abelinks GOLD, Woolwich, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"I wasn't sure if they were talking about bowling, or some weird sexual experience."

it's a fine poem. not much meaning other than itslef though.

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 25 2013 at 5:21 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

I love the description that you used!!

on Apr. 19 2013 at 8:40 pm
Bluetooth13 SILVER, A Town In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
To play a wrong note is insignificant, to play without passion is inexcusable.

~ Ludwig van Beethoven

This is realy good! :)

on Apr. 14 2013 at 7:57 pm
Gage1121 BRONZE, Santa Maria, California
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PLEASE comment and rate 


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