Hey there! I loved this a lot! I thought this line was wonderful, "She wasn’t real she was a Barbie
But you left this Porcelain Doll for a piece of plastic." That'd have to be my favorite. I love the title. I thought the comparison of a barbie and a porcelain doll was really interesting. I liked the concept a lot. I thought that it was going to end very bitter, but it actually ended with a bit of a 'good luck' like hey there are better people out there for you, even thought you betrayed me, just knwo you could do better. I like it, bitter-sweet.

I agree, the rhythm and word choice were excellent. 

Hmm... the metaphore of barbie/vs porcelain doll is a pretty good one, but i cant help be not particularly be fond of it. To me, the point isnt that barbies are geniric and plastic that makes them so worthless, that would make trading someone imporant for someone metaphorically plastic horrendous. No... it is closer to horror that they are toys at all. To trade someone real for someone fake would be the bigger horror. I rebel internally at the speaker calling herself a toy of any type, since neither girl should ever be a toy, should ever be a plaything or sonething merely kept beacuae it amuses. Another issue im afraid i have with this would be the overall tone. Im sorry, but it has a bitter note. I know, that is probably what you wanted, who wouldnt be if they were treated like the speaker in the poem was? But i am afraid that it would have been better if it was laced lightly with a twinge of bitterness as opposed to oozing it from top to bottom. A bitter line here, a bitter line there to show the speaker's mood. As it is, ther eis really not much else noticable in it, all other elements are overwhelmed. For ecample it had a glorious and unique way of stating the same basic idea, of abandonment and replacement, over and over without sounding the same. However, combined with the bitterness, it was really tiring. Its just too heavy.

This is great! I love the rhythm and word choice. The message was clear and strong. Well done!