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An Hourglass for Your Pain in Your Life

March 29, 2013
By Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now


The things we tell ourselves to make us feel better.
The things I tell myself to feel better.
These abandoned promises and hallow flashbacks
Won't stop screening themselves in my conscious.

Are you the one to blame when you are suffering because you can't stop remembering?
This is life.
And pain…

Pain is nothing but a simple compromise.
So that we can get what we want out of it;
Life is full of ambiguities, and nobody gets out of it alive.

I shouldn't throw my life away,
Better yet and more importantly you should not throw your life away.
Life is tied and dragged along with Time.
So as the sand falls down to the bottom,
I ask you the question:
How much time do you have left?



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on Apr. 19 2013 at 11:30 pm
PoetLaureate274 PLATINUM, Manitowoc, Wisconsin
20 articles 1 photo 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have not even begun to scratch the surface of how important your life means to not only me, [y]our friends and [y]our family, but your life, which is a gift for the world that is waiting for you." - Brent Smith.

Impressive and beautiful, poses many intriguing points and engages the reader until the last line. obscure enough to make the reader wonder yet the parts meant to resound sound clear and resonate like the ringing of a bell

on Apr. 19 2013 at 10:44 pm
MissLizzieGirl GOLD, Arvada, Colorado
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how much time do you have left?   This is a question I often ask myself. I honestly don't  know if I will die tomorrow or in sixty years. But being one who frequents hospitals. I am very focused on living each moment like it is my last. Making my legacy. I write for this site because I hope that somewhere someone will remember me.

on Apr. 17 2013 at 8:49 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

keep writing your a natural, i love the emotions and how it makes you think so good job as always :3

on Apr. 17 2013 at 12:11 pm
BrokenWingedDove, Indianapolis, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"You got enemies? Good. That means you've actuall stood up for something in you life." -Eminem

Hey this is actually very good, very thought provoking. You should most definitely keep writing!

on Apr. 16 2013 at 7:26 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

i love the last line..."how much time do you have left?" and isnt that everyones question. it is one of the only things left in our lives that we cant answer. i love this! and i love "dragged along with Time" because it is so cool. i can see it in my mind. this is so profound and astounding and amazingly wonderful! whew...well i really really loved it :)

on Apr. 16 2013 at 6:48 pm
beccalynn1663 GOLD, West Milford, New Jersey
14 articles 2 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let your smile change the world. Don't let the world change your smile.

this is really inspiring! you are amazing!

on Apr. 8 2013 at 7:34 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

this is amazing. it really inspires you to think profound thoughts... i love it <3

on Apr. 7 2013 at 4:08 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

The last stanza is my favorite because it really makes you think. I mean we could all die at any minute from some kinda freak accident so it ally makes you wonder. Love the language and imagery. The picture also goes perfect with the poem great job.

on Apr. 7 2013 at 3:21 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
1 article 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

This is a great poem, I like the use of your puncuation which is put perfectly. Your last line "How much time do you have left?" It makes me question myself and it feels really strong as I read it. Your first stanza sounds really strong, but as it starts getting toward the other stanzas it starts to get weaker it seems. However, the poem is well written.

on Apr. 6 2013 at 8:37 pm
the_sky_is_blue GOLD, Reno, Nevada
14 articles 0 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Become the change you want to see"-Mahatma Gandhi

The first part of this piece is really good and I liked it all the way up to the line, "Nobody gets out of it alive."  From then on, it seemed a little cliche and your use of language was not as good as it could have been.  You demonstrated from the first 2/3 of the poem that you can use the english language to show, rather than tell. This is the ultimate goal of poetry.  One of the wisest men I've had to privalege to know told me to show through poetry rather than tell becuase poetry is the economy of lanuage.  I think you did this perfectly in the line "Won't stop screening themselves in my conscious."   This piece definitely has potential, and I hope you don't take offense to my feedback.  Keep writing!

on Apr. 6 2013 at 6:11 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  I liked the way you would start with one statement and then follow with something very similar. For example: “The things we tell ourselves to make us feel better. // The things I tell myself to feel better.” and also: “I shouldn't throw my life away,  // Better yet and more importantly you should not throw your life away.”. In addition, I though you demonstrated good use of punctuation. It is evident that you focused on small details, which can really make a poem so much more meaningful. Also, I must compliment your word usage. The line “These abandoned promises and hallow flashbacks” is definitely one of my favorites. Overall, great work!

on Apr. 6 2013 at 2:36 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

I love the last stanza.. it sums up your point and the last line is so.. eery? Yeah. I like how you compare pain with time/hourglass. This poem really made me think, and it will stick with me for a long time! Great job!


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