Torn heart

March 31, 2013
By Soccer23 GOLD, Rockton, Illinois
Soccer23 GOLD, Rockton, Illinois
11 articles 11 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength, while loving someone deeply gives you courage.
Lao Tzu


He stares at me
He makes me want to flee
those eyes
make me want to cry
He doesn't realize
that he hurt me to many times
he has been so mean to me
everyone tells me
this is just a teen thing
but I think it isn't
you stomped on my heart bit by bit



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Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 13 2013 at 6:28 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Very descriptive and I like the way u used words; So sad and it depicts alot of meaning! Keep it up :P

on May. 13 2013 at 6:15 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! Good title, it gets the reader's attention. I like the simplicity of your poem. And I liked the line, 'this is just a teen thing'. People say that all too often and I feel like that line is over-used, don't you? Very relatable. In fact, the whole poem is relatable. I thought the set-up was very different from most, the way you spaced things out. I think you have good visuals. And I feel emotion in here. Good job!


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