If only you could see me

March 14, 2013
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Just so you notice me in the midst
Of the bare colored walls, I wear
Florescent polka dot dresses every day.
My heart is hit on by a hailstorm when you pass
By the nook of the passage where I stand but-
That you can’t hear my loud and extremely
Audible internal calamity
Makes those thrashing hailstones bruising
My fragile flesh
Weigh a thousand tons more.





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laurengerhard This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 7:51 pm
Good choice of vocabulary. Xo
 
thatunknownthingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 1:59 am
:) thanks!
 
LexusMarie said...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 6:39 pm
Hello! I really like how even though this is not a rhyming poem it still has a bit of a rythym. The vocabulary in here is really, really good! This is a really good poem, it makes a lot of sense. And the picture goes well with it! Good job! Xx!
 
thatunknownthingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 1:59 am
thanks! :)
 
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