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Darkness will bloom
As you walk by
Rupturing my heart
Can you see it burst?
The inky blackness
Spreading
Spilling over my fingertips
Clouding my breath
Dripping to the floor
Your touch leaves me wanting
Leaves me breathless
But the shadow is consuming
No one talks
No one looks
I am drifting
Sinking
Into the dark cloud
I am alone
Black mist dampens the air
Moistening my lips
Swirling fragments of glass
Shatter against my skin
As the voices drift away
Fading into the distance
Never ending silence
As you walk by
But do you see me?



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Night_Star said...
May 4, 2013 at 12:51 am:
I loved it !!!! Beautifuly dark.It really left me thinking  1000%
 
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Tabitha1233This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 27, 2013 at 10:45 am:
Great poem! Thwere's alot of depth and meaning!
 
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FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 26, 2013 at 11:03 pm:
i agree with hte puncutaion but way to be deep and intense
 
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KatielinThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 19, 2013 at 10:14 pm:
I like it but I suggest more punctuation. Just play around with it.
 
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MeggieMillsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 19, 2013 at 3:34 pm:
This is such beautiful work... I love it. The same meaning is in my heart too.
 
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victorious- said...
Apr. 18, 2013 at 8:04 am:
awesome...............well done..........
 
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ZaZaGoober said...
Apr. 17, 2013 at 10:36 pm:
This poem makes me sigh and I mean that in agood way :) Your description is wicked and and you should definately write more.
 
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swat17 said...
Apr. 17, 2013 at 9:20 pm:
I love the imagery, terrific job! 5/5
 
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FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 17, 2013 at 9:07 pm:
I know how you feel, but  keep it up i love how your poem went
 
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Sunny225This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 11, 2013 at 5:22 pm:
i luv it please keep writing more
 
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readaholicThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 6, 2013 at 8:18 pm:
I agree, the flow is very good.  I really love the imagery and word choice.  Very, very good poem!
 
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FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 31, 2013 at 12:31 pm:
keeo writing that was really good :3 i loved the flow
 
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ZainabS said...
Mar. 31, 2013 at 12:30 pm:
Keep writing man, thats really good :D
 
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