Elemental Love This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

August 23, 2008
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When I saw you
It was chemistry.
I knew then we were meant to be
In equilibrium,
Like sodium and chloride
(But not so tart).
You were my dioxide; and
Our glance was the start
Of a homogeneous reaction,
An explosive combustion
Of neon and helium.
And we’d be like an element,
Completely inseparable.
And when you laid that rock-hard
Hunk of flawless,
Hexoctahedral carbon
Onto my finger,
I knew we would forever
Have triple bonds
To tie together our heartstrings.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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lexxtalksalot said...
Jan. 4, 2009 at 9:52 pm
this poem is not my favorite, and i find it kind of weird.
but thats just my opinion.
a lot of other people seem to enjoy this, when i just don't even want to continue reading it.
just some constructive criticism .. try something new, as in possibly being a scientist not a writer.
evans said...
Jan. 4, 2009 at 5:06 pm
This was an amazing poem. I'm a ninth grade English teacher, and I'm sharing it with my classes tomorrow!
aspiringwrite said...
Jan. 4, 2009 at 3:37 pm
I can't say it was really a love poem to normal people, but it would be if you really understand what you're reading. For me, I like how you use the scientific elements, though I found it hard to comprehend.
FredDwashere said...
Dec. 23, 2008 at 4:59 pm
Awesome poem I loved how you combined science terminology with a poem about love. It's totally clever!
SHITHEAD said...
Dec. 22, 2008 at 8:50 pm
tweedle dee said...
Dec. 18, 2008 at 9:07 pm
kinda weird not really all that romantic.
miss said...
Dec. 15, 2008 at 5:06 pm
this poem is really cute! haha
swinginme! said...
Dec. 14, 2008 at 7:03 am
i love love love this!!! i feel kind of nerdy that i understood all of that! haha great job hon!
abmik49 said...
Dec. 12, 2008 at 9:06 pm
Oh my gosh...Thank you, guys ^ ^;; I never thought I'd get so many comments...Thanks!
And, to answer soccer: give it time. You'll feel what's right and when to do it. I know that sounds terrible, but it'll work--usually your instincts and your conscience are right, at least that's what I've found.
....AH! Thanks, everyone!! ^//^
taily123 said...
Dec. 12, 2008 at 5:21 pm
this poem is really good. I think its really cute! :]
soccerswimmilano said...
Dec. 11, 2008 at 2:09 am
omg one of best poem ever. i feel the same way only he is dating my best friend. any advice?
JP175361 said...
Dec. 3, 2008 at 12:11 am
the elemental love is a werid love poem its only talk out the elemen
abmik49 said...
Dec. 3, 2008 at 3:36 am
Well...Daghm. Thanks ^ ^ It was just one of those silly assignments they gave us in my creative writing class (write about something in the language of something else), and I just went with it. Haha...thank you ^ ^;;
soccerswim said...
Dec. 5, 2008 at 3:43 pm
not the most romantic poem ever, but it is a creative one and it works well.
Midnight Metal said...
Dec. 5, 2008 at 3:34 pm
Wow. Very nice. Superb play on words and very articulated. I love it.
Morgan said...
Dec. 5, 2008 at 10:46 pm
Wow! I really liked this poem! Great job.
jman1 said...
Dec. 5, 2008 at 7:56 pm
I love it it rocks
live laugh love forever said...
Dec. 10, 2008 at 1:32 am
i relly lik dat poem that sounds like me a lot
saragw said...
Dec. 7, 2008 at 9:38 pm
i really love this first because it expresses exactly what i feel and second because i like chemistry (im taking AP Chem this year) so i loved how you worked in the imagery without making it sound overintellectual.
breika said...
Nov. 27, 2008 at 4:30 pm
i love this poem it leaves me speechless
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