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Finding The Key

March 16, 2013
By LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.


On a rope that's unbreakable,
practicing a religion that seems unfaithful,
playing a game I'll never win.
Abiding by rules that benefit who? That's right, not even you.

You say that patience is the key-
The key to what? An endless infinity.
If I stay here, I'm forever attached to you.
If I leave, I must find a new key.

On a strand that's a helpful band,
touching a hand that grabs ahold.
Before I was walking to I am sure nowhere
now I am running to the finish line of my new somewhere.

He says that love is all he needs-
I happen to be his and now I am complete.
I finally found it, old hopeless love;
the key to the life I once dreamed of.


The author's comments:
When you find the key you'll know.

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on May. 3 2013 at 11:46 am
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

This is yet another great poem. I love the way thT ll of your poems have such powerful meanings and memories in them, and they all flow so beautifully.

on Apr. 29 2013 at 7:38 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

the poem is to the point :D love it! It flows just right and the comparison is perfect!! :D great job!

on Apr. 9 2013 at 6:16 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

You will! Hey, a new poem and story is up! c: And okay!

on Apr. 9 2013 at 4:00 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Nooooooooooo I have not "found my key" lol also I have to pieces tht are pending so ill tell you when they r up!

on Apr. 8 2013 at 7:08 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Haha, no, not yet. :c I am though, one day! Have you? Ohhh! And hey, the story you wanted of mine to be posted is finally pending, along with two new poems.. so, they will be up eventually!

on Apr. 8 2013 at 6:25 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

awesome!! just one question:   have you found ur key?? lol grt job like always!

on Apr. 5 2013 at 11:09 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

Beautiful! A perfect comparison!

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on Apr. 3 2013 at 2:09 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I love the beginning because of the use of paradox. And the ending is simply the ending we all want in life.  The happy ending to life. 

on Apr. 3 2013 at 10:58 am
7_Ambitions GOLD, Bronx, New York
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Honestly I Love This Poem and I Quickly Got The Point Its Amazing I Wouldnt Change Anything

on Apr. 2 2013 at 6:06 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Thanks so much!

on Apr. 2 2013 at 3:54 pm
laurengerhard SILVER, South Windsor, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am gone quite mad with the knowledge of accepting the overwhelming number of things I can never know, places I can never go, and people I can never be." -Sylvia Plath

Constructively, I would change the last line of the second stanza. Other than that, I like it! The last two lines end of a bang. :)

on Apr. 1 2013 at 7:31 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  I really liked the first stanza of this. Overall, you may benefit from going over the poem once more and fixing a few small things. For example, I would change the last line of the second stanza to something that does not include the word “key”—just for variety’s sake. But that is only a personal opinion, so feel free to take it with a grain of salt. :)

on Apr. 1 2013 at 6:59 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I like this, even though it could be cleaned up a little :) I like the metaphor, too. Good job! 

on Apr. 1 2013 at 3:39 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
1 article 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

I like how you connect the idea with a key

on Mar. 31 2013 at 10:30 am
writergirl36 GOLD, Chattanooga, Tennessee
14 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass. It's about learning how to dance in the rain!"

I love the way you wrote this poem. It really made me think about patience and love. Keep writing!!!